Rating applies to all chapters... It's bloody brilliant. I do believe I'll remember this story as much as I will always remember JKR's. I just have to say... Thank you.Author's Response: Thanks a million, I am so glad you enjoyed it. This was the first fanfiction I ever wrote, way back in 2007, so I am really happy people still like it, 6 years later!! Thanks so much for your lovely review :) Report Review
its dsnt end here right??? you'll write more to it...won't ya??? plzz do..and by d way, you write awesome, it was like reading a 2nd book of Deathly Hallows!!Author's Response: Hi there, well this chapter you just reviewed is the second last one: Hogwarts is fighting back. Chapter 10, the last one, is up (and has been for years) and it's the last one. It's called: The Final Battle.
In terms of writing more than those ten chapters - well you know yourself what has to happen in chapter 10, but what I have done is sort of write a sequel to this story, called "I Hope He Will Understand", which is about Harry and Teddy, where Harry helps Teddy understand who is father was and why he died.
I've also written a sort of prequel as well, "Door into the Dark", which will be about Remus's whole life, from his first encounter with Death, to his last (which alas, is his own death), which will, ultimately (if I ever make it to the end) cover what this fic has covered, but I plan on doing it in more detail, and doing it better. The Last Marauder was the first fic I ever wrote, and I was really small when I wrote it, I feel I have gotten much better in the 5 and a half years since.
Anyway, I'm so glad you are enjoying this - the last chapter is there, never fear, so read away.
Thanks again for all the reviews, they really made me smile :-) Report Review
I've just read your summary of Chapter1 , and added to my favorite stories. There are a lot of stories that were not told by J.K.Rowling. I'll read your whole stories soon.Author's Response: Thanks, but I will admit now that this is the first ever fanfic I wrote, way back in 2007, and I was really young so it's not brilliant, far from it really. But read away! I hope you find it okay anyhow... :-) Report Review
How very touching. I feel like celebrating too.Author's Response: Thank you. I am so glad you liked this. It was the first fic I ever wrote and I wrote it when I was very young. Thanks so much again Report Review
Hi, there! Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the Common Room.
Wow. I have to say that you managed to get inside Lupin's head like few other authors I've ever read. Not just get inside of it, mind you, but make yourself comfortable and stay a while. Really settle in and explore. I loved the amount of canon that you were able to draw into this, the breadth and depth of Remus's experiences that you drew on. Yet it didn't feel like it was wandering, because you kept coming back to the central touchstones of the chapter: his guilt over what he did to Harry and the conflict between his feelings of self-loathing and his desire to be happy. I thought you did a brilliant job of weaving it all together.
The Shrieking Shack was a terrific setting for this, both in terms of how it put him in a pensive, nostalgic frame of mind and in how it set up the ending. All the little historical details that you worked in: the bed, the scratches on the wall, even Snape's bloodstain, added so much to my appreciation of the whole scene. Especially Snape's bloodstain. For some reason, that gave me an almost perverse sort of enjoyment.
"Feelings arenít meant to be shared. They should be repressed and hidden away from all things decent and normal." - How horrible and bleak! If any one line of this chapter captures Remus's self-loathing and disaffection, this is it.
I honestly had never thought too much about how Remus went about coming to his senses after his disastrous encounter with Harry at Grimmauld Place, but I think it's safe to say that this chapter will make up the majority of my headcanon on the subject for a long time to come. Of course he shouldn't have cursed Harry. Of course Harry was right. Tactless and blunt to the point of being rude, but right. Remus knows this, and he knows that Harry was only saying what he needed to hear. That realization makes the wolf's temporary moment of control all the more horrible for him, and you did an amazing job of capturing that in words and feelings.
Then, in the middle of this heavy, heavy chapter, you took us on a brief sentimental journey. At first, I honestly wasn't certain what the point was. It seemed so wonderful and light-hearted. But you quickly came to the point. Even among his best friends, Remus still felt like a monster. Sure, he managed to mostly control it and conceal it and put a happy face on the aftermath, but he still came away feeling that when push came to shove, he couldn't trust himself. It added a slightly different facet to his self-doubt from most other fics I've read and I really liked it.
The scene with the Dementors was chilling and gripping. You put so much realism into the encounter. All of Remus's worst memories being drug to the surface and used against him. And the crown jewel of the entire piece is that his last happy memory, the one that saves him, is the very thought that he's been trying to drive out of his mind. The reason he left and the genesis of the entire confrontation with Harry that started him down this dark path of confusion and doubt. That was the coup de grace of this chapter. It was truly inspired!
Your writing was fabulous in this. Everything flowed wonderfully and it was a very smooth, quick read. It didn't feel nearly as long as it was.
Constructive criticism? Not much, I'm afraid. The biggest concern I have at the moment is, after cramming so much into this amazing opening chapter, what's left for the rest of the story. But knowing you, I'm sure you have plenty in store!
Well done!Author's Response: Hi there yourself. I will admit though when I saw that you had picked this story to review, I was slightly mortified to tell you the truth. I wrote this when I was 15 and it was the first HP fan-fic I ever wrote, in fact it was the first story I ever wrote that was over 2,000 words. It's pretty dreadful and I know that, and the only reason it is recently updated is because my account was being reviewed for TA status and one of the chapters had too many direct quotes in it and I had to change that, hence the recent update... I sort of want to delete this, but I can never bring myself to do it because it was my first fic, because it's the story that gave me my pen-name and because it sort of shows me how far I've come in the 5 years since. I am sort of re-writing this whole fic in my new story "Door Into the Dark" which is much better (or so I think anyway).
All that said, I will admit I was pleasantly surprised at this review - 15 year old me would be very VERY happy with it! I'm glad you think I got into Lupin's head well. I don't know why I just always seemed to be able to do that with relative ease. I just understood him more than anyone else and it was just easy to see things from his pov. He's the character I can most relate to, not that I'm a werewolf or anything, just because I think we all grapple with inner demons and one point or another.
I'm glad you liked the Shrieking Shack, the setting just seemed to fit for me. It's been so long since I've actually read this fic that I don't even remember my rationale for choosing it!
I'm just glad you think I got the self-depreciation and self-loathing across, as well as his sense of confusion and doubt, because if I remember correctly the reason I wrote this fic was because Lupin is my favourite character and I was really angry with him for leaving Tonks, and other readers were just saying such awful things about him after this, that I just felt I had to justify his actions, to myself and to them. He's not bad and it's not that he got cold feet and no longer loved Tonks, it's far more complicated than that. He loves her, it's just 30-odd years of being told he's a monster who doesn't deserve to live have just caught up with him, you know? That and he's also scared of being happy, because every time in the past when he was happy, Death took that happiness anyway from him, now he just feels that if he is happy, something is wrong.
I'm glad you liked the ending with the Dementor, I thought it was slightly cliched with I went with it anyway because it just seemed to fit and make sense.
I'm fast running out of words before this response goes over the limit, so I just want to say thanks so much for sort of redeeming this story in my eyes a bit. I don't consider it as dreadful and cringe-worthy now as I did prior to reading your review. 15 year old me would be very proud of all the lovely things you've said. Thanks so much! Report Review
I am crying now. Why did they have to die??? :(
Really great story btw!Author's Response: I know what you mean! Why did Lupin and Tonks have to die??? It was not fair! I cried myself when I read that they had died in Deathly Hallows! Anyway, I am so glad you liked my story! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it :) Report Review
Excellently written, few spelling mistakes, might want to get rid of the numbers, just use astrixes. Congratulations, you actually managed to bring Tonks and Lupin to life. Thank you.Author's Response: Cheers, thank you so much! I'll definitely give this another read over and try and spot all those spelling mistakes (my brain always fails to spot them for some reason!!!). I'll also change the numbers to astrixes too, thanks for the suggestion, I guess the numbers are a bit distracting and random.
I am very glad you think I brought Lupin and Tonks to life. Thank yo so much for the review! I am so glad you enjoyed the story and I'll try my best to remove the spelling mistakes. Thanks again :) Report Review
Love it!! Potterwatch is so creative!!Author's Response: Thank you! So glad you like it! :-) Report Review
Wow, awesomeness and coolness. This really keeps me occupied!!Author's Response: Thank you! I am so glad you liked it! I've other stories too if you want to check them out as well. Thanks again for all the reviews! :) Report Review
Wowowowowow!! I am so impressed!!Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Awesome!! I love it!! So creative!!
Potterwatch...Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I am so glad you liked it! Report Review
He was still Remus Lupin
LOL...Author's Response: hahaha, now that you point it out, taken out of context that line is, not only exceptionally random, but it doesn't make any sense either!
Glad I made you lol ;) Report Review
Love the whole: Last Maurader thingAuthor's Response: Cheers! So do I! Hence why it was the title I gave my first ever fan-fic (ie. THIS one) and it's also my pen-name, so I am very fond of the whole concept of the 'Last Marauder'. I'm so glad you like it too! :) Report Review
Wowowowowow!! What imagination!! Love it!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am so glad you like my story :) Report Review
good second chapter! I like how Ted reacts to Remus coming back. But Tonks isn't angry at him at all for leaving her! Hm. Oh well :)Author's Response: Actually the thought never entered my head to have Tonks angry at Lupin for leaving. I always thought that she was just so glad that he was back that she couldn't be angry, but now that you mention it.. yeah she most definitely would have been angry! I think you're right. I will go back and re-write this chapter to make Tonks more angry. Cheers for the criticism and the review! :) Hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Report Review
Wow, great chapter! You portrayed Lupin perfectly. I have no complaints :) The scene with the dementors is very powerful.Author's Response: Thanks so much! I am so glad you enjoyed this chapter!!! :) Report Review
mind blowing chapter u know
i was continuously laughing for 5 minutes over the twins joke of fake wand. ( i got dirty look from my room partner for this).
what a start of this chapter !
what are u waiting for go go ( it make me smile)
u know rowling should not overlooked remus so badly in last part . i am guessing she will write more about him in pottermore.
i thought luna will make some funny and amusing statement, but she didn't. ( it make me little sad as i like her very much)
awesomeAuthor's Response: Thank you! I am so glad you liked the bit about the joke-wand! I did too!
I agree with you too that JK Rowling should have written more about Lupin in Deathly Hallows, but I also feel that the film never should have left Teddy out either, that really annoyed me. I do think, however, that JK Rowling will put more information about Lupin on Pottermore, I mean she put all of McGonagall's back-story up there, as well as the Dursleys' one too. So Lupin will be there, or so I hope!
The only reason I didn't give Luna a funny line was because JK Rowling wrote that scene in Deathly Hallows and she didn't give her a line. I want to fill the holes in the story, I don't want to change the scene she actually wrote. I want to stick to the actual canon as much as I can. But I do agree with you, that scene could have done with a funny line from Luna, JK Rowling should have written one!
Anyway, thanks again for the review, much appreciated! I'm glad you liked this chapter Report Review
u know u have written very well each chapter.
as usual i have few doubts.
1. u have written that death eater now knew that ron is actually faking of disease and so weaselys have vacated the borrows but as in ur story here aurther and twins are fighting against death eater . so it would be more appropriate if u mention this reason also that they now have proof that whole weasely is in order.
2. why bill has not informed about potter rescue yet to the order as trio went to his house?
over all i know u have not gone in detail so this little contradiction will arise.
its very difficult to summarize the whole deathly hallowes in 10 chapters
p.s- fighting scene was awesome and the best line was twin's joke .
10/10Author's Response: Hi there. I am very sorry, but I don't quite understand what you are getting at in your first point. Arthur and the twins were fighting against the Death Eaters in the last chapter BEFORE the Death Eaters knew Ron was with Harry. The two events happen simultaneously: the Snatchers bring Harry, Ron and Hermione to Malfoy Manner, and the 3 Weasleys, Kingsley and Lupin fight off the Death Eaters attacking the Prime Minister. The Death Eaters, however, disapparate the instant they know (because their Dark Marks burn) that the Malfoy's have Harry. They have no need to target the Weasley family while they have Ron locked up in the cellar, furthermore, they only know that they have Harry, they don't know anything about having Ron or Hermione yet. It's only after the trio have escaped that the Weasley family are in danger, so they start moving into Muriel's then, when Bill informs them that the trio escaped the Death Eaters. So this brings us to your second point. Yes, Bill should have informed Molly and Arthur that Harry, Ron and Hermione were safe. That's a slight slip-up on my part. I'll fix that now.
Thanks for the reivew, hope you like the rest of the story. :) Report Review
i am feeling very very sad. that much i can say.
just one line its best chapter yet
those who love remus will definitely start hating moon now.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am glad you liked it! :) Report Review
thats ultimate chapter
thanks for this one.
as u said u wanted to move the story , u did.
many things has happened in this chapter.
i can bet ludo must have been killed by goblins. (lollz)
i am looking forward for a live description of potterwatch . i hope u have done it .
the plot which u have created to find out the taboo is amazing , but u killed 2 innocent one , i am feeling sorry for them.
i think in second chapter while remus was talking to dora has mentioned the dark lord name . at that time i thought to mention u this very little mistake but i left that
i think now u can edit that
anyway i never felt bore while i was reading this one
i was not aware that u guys use rat word to insult other. now i understood
p.s- i am from India. i too want to write story . i have few ideas also but english is not my first language. so it very difficult for me to write what i want in this language.Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked this chapter. Also thanks for pointing out about Lupin using Voldemort's name in the second chapter, that was a slip on my part and I'll go back and change that now. Yes there will be a live Potterwatch coming, don't worry, I just hope you like it.
That's really cool that you're Indian, I've never been to India myself. Don't worry about English not being your first language, because I can understand everything you say so it's all OK!
I hope you enjoy the rest of the story, and thanks again for the review, much appreciated. Report Review
u have started really well
its so strange that when everyone loves moon and its cool light werewolves fear it.
that line when tonks told about moon that its so pretty or something like that its very realistic. anyone who will see the moon will definitely admire its beauty at first sight , its basic instinct.
but u know i was little surprised i thought u will start this chapter where u left the previous one
i thought remus will now tell the whole incident to tonks which occurs with harry and also most importantly his happiest feeling ( which he had just found during encounter with dementors )
i think dora must have right to hear it from remus mouth as earlier he had left her suddenly
whenever fred and george came into picture it make me smile , they are so lovely , they always know how to reduce the tension and make people laugh
As harry had stolen the madeye's magical eye from her office , i thought u will also brought it up but i think kingslay has no idea about it ( in ur story or u have forget about it lollzz)
any way u have written pretty well
p.s- i am glad u like my review and also a special thank with pumpkin juice and frog chocolate for considering me ur one of the best reviewerAuthor's Response: Hi again! Random question, I was just wondering, what part of the world are you from?? I'm Irish, just for the record! ;)
Anyway, back to fan-fiction. I am glad you liked the bit about the moon, where Tonks found it beautiful and Lupin thought it horrible. I really like that bit myself. :)
With regard to your other comment: Remus explained everything to Tonks in the previous chapter, and since he did that, I did not continue the explanation into this chapter. I was anxious for the story to move forward and not to dwell too much on that particular moment. Tonks knows Lupin loves her, she understands why he left and why he came back, I don't feel that more needs to be said on that subject, a story must move forward, it can't drag on, or so I think anyway!
With regards to Mad-Eye's eye that Harry stole from the Ministry, I imagine that Umbridge would want to hush that all up, she would not want word to get out that her office was broken into and that someone had stolen something, in case others try and do the same thing, causing some sort of revolt against her (like what happened between her and the Students of Hogwarts in 'Order of the Phoenix'). It is for this reason that Kingsley doesn't know that Harry has stolen the eye from Umbridge's office. That's my reasoning anyway.
I am glad you like Fred and George, I love them too, they are great comic relief both in the books and the films and they are just both great chapters. They always make me laugh.
Thanks again for the review. Report Review
another good chapter .thanks agn for this one
i must say i just wanted to be at the place of mrs. tonks so that i can hit tonks !
how can he say that he is a werewolf , then isn't he is a mudblood
but as i thought again i found out he is also a father who wants to protect his girl.
nothing wrong i found out in this chapter.
u have portrayed remus feeling really good.
and if i would be sirius then first i would kick his *** for not telling us about his truth (hehehe) as in my real life also friendship means everything and i simply not forgive my frndz if they lie to me
lollz remus fell in love to tonks when she knocked down the troll umbrella its beautiful .
i am going to read next chapter tomorrow
parasharAuthor's Response: Thanks again for the review, I'm glad you didn't think that I made any mistakes in his chapter!!! YAY!
I am glad too that you saw the duality to Ted Tonks, he only called Lupin a werewolf, not out of malice, but because he wanted to protect his daughter! I am so really happy that you think I protrayed Lupin's feelings well in this chapter!!! :D
I am so glad you like this chapter, thanks very much for reading and reviewing it, you make me smile!!! I hope you enjoy the next chapter to when you get around to reading it tomorrow! ;) Report Review
u have started really well
now i am reading from the starting .
it seems its going to be a wonderful story.
sorry but i always like to tell the truth . hope it will make u a great writer.
the whole incident with rosemetra was fabulous but i want to pointed out one thing that werewolf cannot remember anything while he is in wolf form thats the basic difference between werewolf and anigami . hope u understand what i want to pointed out .
u can plot it as podfoot told him this night adventure to him and now he was recollecting it.
but if we just forget this little mistake , i can say that its amazing.
i always wonder why wormtail was in gryfindor. he is such a coward.Author's Response: Firstly, don't worry at all, keep telling the truth, I don't mind and I am not taking it personally - don't feel bad about telling the truth, constructive criticism is always good!
I take your point about werewolves not being about to remember anything while in wolf form, but I think he can remember things, because in 'Prisoner of Azkaban', Lupin tells Harry that when James, Sirius and Peter were with him as animals, Lupin's mind became 'less wolfish', so I took that to mean that while Lupin was with his animal friends, his mind became a little more human, so therefore we could remember things that happened. Plus, he tells Harry that there were 'near misses, and many of them, we would laugh about them afterwards' when they all explored the grounds with Lupin as a werewolf, which I took to mean that Lupin remembered these 'near misses'. Plus, Hagrid tells Harry that he was worried that Lupin might have hurt Buckbeak when Lupin was loose in the grounds as a werewolf, but Lupin told Hagrid he didn't eat anything when he was a werewolf that night so Buckbeak was OK, which again, I took to mean that he could remember bits of what happened at least. I may be wrong, but based on those points from the books, I think that while Lupin is in the company of James, Sirius and Petere in their animal forms, his mind is less wolfish, and therefore he can remember things. Again, keep telling the truth, it's great and don't feel bad about it, I'm not taking it personally at all! :)
I hope that clears things up, but if you still think I've made a mistake, please let me know, I don't want to be making mistakes!
Thanks again for the review!!! :) Report Review
its amazing. i have just read the last chapter final battle as lupin was always my fav.
i really felt disappointed when in last part rowling didn't give her more space.
i really want to know how can remus be dead as he was one of the best against dark arts and in duelling . u have really created best plot and the reason he died to save the children .
but as u have given more space to remus u have not done justice to dora in the battle as i think . i don't think she died so easily
u should make some good reason for her departure .
its just my view don't take it personally
but one thing i truelly want to say that finally remus will be happy as u have done justice to him (lollz)
thanks for this amazing chapterAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks for the review. Lupin is my favourite character too ;) And I was super annoyed that he did not have a death scene in the books, so I wrote him one myself, just to help me come to terms with him dying and everything.
I take your comment about Tonks, and don't worry, I'm not taking it personally. I kinda see where you are getting at about Tonks not having enough space in this chapter. I guess it's more to do with the fact that this story is really about Lupin's journey, not Tonks's. The focus is Lupin, not Tonks, hence why she doesn't get as much time in the whole story as he does. You said you only read the last chapter, and based on reading the last chapter alone I can understand why you think Tonks got less time than Lupin. The focus of this story is Lupin, not Tonks really. The only reason I wrote from her point of view in the last chapter (I haven't done that in any other chapter) is to show the effect Lupin's death had on her, that and she didn't get a death scene in the books either and I thought I would give her too. But I take your point that I haven't done Tonks justice, mainly because I was trying to do Lupin justice, not Tonks. Do you have any suggestions on how I could do Tonks justice more? I'd appreciate come suggestions!!! :)
All that a side, I am glad you think my story is good. It's the first fan-fic I ever wrote (and I actually wrote the last chapter before I wrote the first) and I was still quite young when I wrote it so I thank you very much for those kind words. ;) Report Review
I loved this! I was off school sick today, so I read all of your story and I loved it! 10/10!Author's Response: Thanks so much, for the review and the 10/10. You made my day! I hope you feel better soon! :) Report Review
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