Reading Reviews for In The Dead Of Night
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Review #1, by LynnHelven Charms Class

18th December 2007:
You are being a teensy bit to unoriginal. I mean, it's good that you stay true to the books, but introduce variations, and don't go straight to te famous phrases. I look forward to reading the rest

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Review #2, by LynnHelven Gathering Information

18th December 2007:
A few criticisms:
a) I don't think that Sirius and James would have told Peter so easily, if at all. I think they probably would have left it to Remus to do the telling.
b) Things are moving to quickly. Slow down. Try to give descriptions in more detail at times.
c) Surely Sirius and James and Peter would have questions for Remus before they rushed on blindly? Try to develop their relationships a little more to make it a little mor interesting.

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Review #3, by LynnHelven Transformation

18th December 2007:
This is a good way to do the finding ou about Remus bit, my only criticism is that I thought the transformation was written to hastily, it took away from the suspense a little. Otherwise, very good.

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Review #4, by LynnHelven The brink of discovery

18th December 2007:
This looks really promising, I look forward to reading the rest. You have created good intrigue and *drops poshness of words* unputdownableishness. Well done.

(please please please read and review mine!)

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Review #5, by NevillesSoulmate Transformation

11th September 2007:
I really liked it! I'm glad you didn't leave a cliffie, though! ; )

Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm so glad you like it- I get paranoid that something doesn't make sense or nobody will like it xD

I'm in the process of writing Chapter 3 now and I'll hopfully have it up pretty soon :-)

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Review #6, by NevillesSoulmate The brink of discovery

5th September 2007:
This was a great start! I loved the notes James kept throwing at Lily, especially, 'Positive comments and all that jazz'. Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thanks very much :)

Most of the next chapter is already wirtten, so it shouldn't be long until it's up too :-)

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