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really good!!!
but, maybe you need to expand it abit!
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i really like your plotline and ideas, but the descriptions are just not there! it just flat out says stuff and doesn't give much description as to the transition from scene to scene or much anything like that. i will say i did like the description of hermione's dress, that was well done. i did enjoy the chapter though. on your next chapter please work extra hard to add in descriptive words and sentences!! again, all in all, a very entertaining and enjoyable story. great job :) and i'm extremely technologically challenged as well! high five to non-tech people :D

p.s., i'd love it if you read/reviewed my story(s), i'd like to see your opinion on them. thanks :)


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better on the descriptions, and i like how you invented a new spell and background to it, etc. but remember draco doesn't say voldemorts name, but in this you had him say 'lord voldemort wants to see you when you wake.' you should probably change that to the dark lord instead of lord voldemort. a great chapter though still. you should give some more descriptions on the setting and little details that make a story unique and interesting. but still, good job, i enjoyed reading it :)


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wow i really liked that. it was kind of interesting, but i think you should have given a little more background information. i felt like if you had given some more detailed descriptions rather than 'there was a pool, and clothes, etc' it would have made the story more enjoyable. all in all, a good story and plotline :)


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Good, but storyline... Hermione would never join the Death Eaters unless for a really good reason. Keep writing!

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great start! keep going!!!

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