OMG! SO SUPER ADORABLE! amazing job! U really need to keep writing LJ one shots! I will read them I swear! *Claps and lots of cookies*-CharlyAuthor's Response: I will...I figure out something to write. Thanks so much. Report Review
Awww that was so sweet lol aww bless them lolAuthor's Response: Thank you. Report Review
wow that was amazing
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Hi!! Your fic is very beautiful and sweet but there are also a lot of grammar mistakes that marr it a little...However I must say that the story is a tiny bit sexist (or at least I interprete it like this) because.I don't know, but it gives me that feeling... However compliments and Toodles!!!Author's Response: interesting...thanks though. Report Review
the only smile he gave to her
"the smile he only gave to her"
she knew that she wasn’t a prize to be one
"she knew she wasnt a prize to be won"
wow. this story needs help its very good just it needs to be beta read because theres alot of errors and the sentinces are choppy.
Which he laid her on the bed and started to make love with her.
thats the most random line i've ever read in the story. i dont even think its correct. sorry. you need to fix thisAuthor's Response: I know I need to fix it. I do have a beta, and she has the story. But it will be fixed thanks. Report Review
a couple of grammatical errors but other than that it was written very very well.ehehe...great story!Author's Response: Thanks, I do have problems with grammer always have had those kind of problems. Thanks. Report Review
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