It was so mushy and corny but I loved it. Report Review
Well this is certainly a twist. I like the fact itís so original itís so unlikely that something like that would happen but itís also very likely you know people always imagine James and Lily to be so perfect and noble but this piece showed them to be just human and humans are not perfect. Though it kinda sucks for Alicia. I actually though when reading your summary that it would be about James marrying Lily while loving someone else so Iím sure you could understand my confession when I found he was marrying someone else ( Alicia) and loved Lily. But yeah I liked it!
- Cleopatra ( Slytherin Report Review
I like it, but I've got to admit, not very likely. Lily wouldn't have an affair, and James, I don't think he would ever break it with Lily. It just doesn't seem right.Author's Response: Very true, but I was just trying something new anyway.
Thanks for the review!
-Drue Report Review
This was beautiful. You captured the emotions perfectly. I love it. But, it seems to me that James' so confused. I mean, if he loves Lily, he should be with her, not Alicia. But, I guess that it the major conflict of the story... :) Love it! Report Review
Hey there, I know this is one of your much older pieces, but I still love it. It's this completely over-the-top drama that is just fantastic!
Just put it in the Chain Recommendation Thread.
Just wanted to say well done for putting a great twist on James/Lily, there's nowhere near enough originality when it comes to those two.
Great job =] Report Review
it was great. your an awesome writer one of my top favs on this site. AWESOME! keep writing. I love it. Report Review
AWWW HOW CUTE! GOOD STORY! Report Review
that was great!!!
poor Alicia though. Report Review
Aw that was so sweet and dramatic lol
Hugs Report Review
I liked this story. It was so sad until the end. I really liked it. I love a lot of your stories. You write so well. Report Review
that took my heart. amazing work. you shouldn't have been so harsh with Alicia,even though it was for your script. but at the end, a great work altogether. Report Review
that was so CUTE!! i liked Alicia, though. Report Review
I loved it!!! Especially the ending line!!! 10/10 =) Report Review
What a cute story! Though, I don't understand why James would break up with Lily in the first place. Anyways, good one! (: Report Review
Best Lily/James one-shot I have EVER read! It was so original! 10/10, definately!! Report Review
beautiful, interesting, exciting, story! great job! Report Review
aw!!! but why did james leave lily in the first place?? kinda out of character... Report Review
nothing personal, but I think you've got the James and Lily's personalities totally off. Report Review
Err... Well... I just thought it was too far fetched and WAY too soap operaish. You made Lily look like a boyfriend-stealing slut and James was, well, he was way too out of character. After all, why would be break up with the girl he hadd been trying to get forever for an unapparant reason? And he's way too noble to have a fianc√© and to be having an affair. It just seemed too... unrealistic. But the writing and grammar where really good, so I'm thankful for that. You have no idea how painful it is to read storees dat luk lyke dis. You had near perfect grammar and great paragraphing, so good job on that. I hope you think about my constructive critisism, but don't just dwell on that. You have potential, and this fic started off as a good idea, but it's just the way you characterized Lily and James that bothered me. Keep on working hard, and thank you again for the almost flawless grammar!
Latina Lily Report Review
A lovely story, and well written Report Review
Aww so sweet! 10/10
This is an awesome story! I love! I love!
Perfect! I love the ending, I love the beginning, I love the bits in between...I don't think there is anything I don't like. Report Review
way to cheezy for 1 chapter Report Review
omgosh! i really thought it was gonna end sadly, thank goodness it didn't! about the rating, if 1 is the best, then i give it a 2; if it's not, well, sorry i gave you a bad rating! Report Review
aww this is a cute story. dang i feel bad for alicia!!! poor girl, but lily was right for him all along! Report Review
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