I think that your story plot is fine, however I would work on making sure your braking things down in a logical way and putting as much detail as you can so that we are really getting the picture that you want us to have. I really do think that you should write more.Author's Response: thanks i really didn't think it through and that's why i abandoned it put reviews are helpful though Report Review
i can tell it is gonna be a good story but the way u wrote it was awful no punctuation and u dont no whos talkin when it really was confusin good plot but if u dont improve ur writing then theres no point of u continuing is there as i personally find it difficult wat u are writinAuthor's Response: thank you for your reply its helpful Report Review
A tad confussing with like the speaking cos like I'm not used to reading it like that.
But good. (:
But only Ginny can really return
Harry and the gang were in the 7th year when the battle happened (:
Hope I helped.
Great first chapter.
Check outmy first story if your like
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