Aaw, poor poor Pansy ): I really really LOVE this fic!!
Funny, I'd always thought Pansy was very anoying, but in this fic you give her a very cool personality, and I love it. I don't hate Pansy anymore, yay, you made me a Pansy-fan, good for you, and me, mostly for me I think (: Anyway I'm just babling now.
Again, really good story! Well written! Love it! Thanks for sharing, please keep up the good work! (: Report Review
I may not like Pansy tat much since Im a Dra/Mione fan but its nice to see Pansy in a different light. Nice to see she isnt portrayed as some mindless Draco-loving witch(LOL) Cheers!!! Report Review
That was pretty good. I can't really think of anything else to say except that I enjoyed it. Report Review
Wonderful one-shot. You did a great job with this
10/10!! Report Review
woah!!! i love it. intense and fierce. poor pansy though. =( well i really do hope you continue this. i want to know who the girl is and how pansy will cope with this.
please write more. i'm practically begging you to!!
ps. 9/10Author's Response: haha, maybe someday! Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
this is really cool i love the way ou portray pansy's character
one small criticism would be that you should have made it a short story or something!
i3lG W31rdoAuthor's Response: Thanks =] Report Review
Omg omg ! Who is it !? Hermione !?!?Author's Response: Hmmm... =) Report Review
Ooh I liked this you did a very good job with portraying the mood in this story. I could feel how Pansy was feeling, the pain, the unrequited love very good description and portrayal of emotion on her part and I loved the first paragraph with the rain nice. I can never seem to describe emotion well but you did a very good job with it. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the description; I've been told I give too little description sometimes and I'm glad someone's appreciative of it.
And yes, Pansy. I've always felt that she must have a heart somewhere. Report Review
I liked it but it ends wierd. You should really write another chapter. I'm a big fan of Draco/Hermione fanfiction. If you write another chapter I'll love the story but for now I can't say I love it. I like it but not love it.Author's Response: Well, for now it's staying the way it is. Thank you for your review, maybe I'll expand it some other time... Report Review
One word: AMAZING! No words can really justify this masterpiece! Please continue with the Panst/Draco ship; it's growing on me! Many thanks, Becky x
Merry Christmas!Author's Response: Thank you! Hope you had a good holiday. I'll see if I'll expand the story...for now it's staying the way it is. =) Sorry love, try looking at some of my other works or search Draco/Pansy stories; I'm sure there are many other great stories out there, better then mine! Report Review
I loved this story!! It was so good: the dialogue was perfect and the images were wonderful. Great story!!Author's Response: Thank you for such a sweet review, I'm glad you found it realistic. Report Review
I just loved it!
It's amazingly well written,
and states a much interesting view of the relation ship between Draco and Pancy.
Congratilations! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing, it's much appreciated =) Report Review
I loved it!!
It was incredibly amazing!!
Please write more.Author's Response: I might, thanks! Report Review
I like this story! I love how you portrayed Pansy, and it really does give a view to something I had never thought about before! Awesome story!Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the review! Report Review
Hey! Here as requested!!
Wow. I'm gonna be truthful, I don't normally care all that much for the Slytherin/Draco stories, but this was really good! I could almost get into Pansy's shoes and feel what she was feeling. That's awesome, especially in a catergory I don't normally read.
This story had me switching sides. Lol. At first, I was thinking poor Pansy, knowing Draco doesn't love her. Then I was supporting Draco, with the truth in what he was saying. Then I was back to supporting Pansy. Lol. Good job! I really liked the beginning, though. I thought the description in it was very well done.
The rain was dripping steadily against the glass of window pane, the storm long over. Soft gentle light from the moon was shining through, finally making its way past the dark, dense clouds. Her wet hair soaked through to her white shirt, revealing the skin beneath it. Her eyes were misty and as blank as a porcelain doll’s. Not cared for, just admired and used when wanted. Otherwise, she had no feelings, no cares, and no goals in the world. That was how she was viewed, wasn’t it?
And finally, I liked Pansy in general. In truth, I never give Slytherins such as Pansy much thought. But I like how you give her a personality and feelings and some information on her home life. I thought it gives more depth into her. Overall, very good story!
Author's Response: Hey Gin!
I never liked Draco/Anyone but Hermione either to be honest. I set this story up as a challenge for myself, just to see if I could actually write it convincingly. In canon, I don't like Pansy at all. I don't feel bad for her in the slightest, but I wanted to think about reasons why I could feel bad for her, you know? Nobody can be the way she is for no reason.
Anyway, I'm glad you liked that description and thank you so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
I love this, its fantastically written. Esspecially not saying who the other girl is and Pansy's heartfelt confessions.
Nice work :)Author's Response: Thank you!
I'm so glad you liked it.
I always felt Pansy must have some emotion besides being that evil girl in school. Everyone has their secrets, right?
=) Thanks for leaving a lovely review. Report Review
omg who is this she?Author's Response: And the cliff-hanger remains hanging...=) Report Review
Hey hun! Well, thanks! I had a lot of fun beta'ing this story, and you know I think its awesome =) Its great when you get to work with an already brilliant story! But I loved the plot for this, it's very original, and you wrote it realistically too! Great job! Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so happy you beta'd this for me. =) You helped alot, believe me. Hope you can edit some of my other stories sometime too because they aren't as amazing without your touch, haha.
Thank you for reviewing. Report Review
omg even tho it was a one shot it made me crry see i love wen ppl have a different pint of view of toherr side brilliant bravvoo amazing please let there be a sequel!!1Author's Response: Aw, thank you! And I might add on to this to make it an actual story later on. But I have so many other stories going on right now, adding this would be too much. Thank you so much for reviewing though! Report Review
I adored this story; a wonderful one-shot, really! Great job, 10/10!!!
~Linnéa Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
I found one single mistake in this and that's probably just there because you wrote to fast: "the way she usually liked them them."
Other than that this was wellwritten and I found the argument between Pansy and Draco fascinating. I'm glad you found the human side of pansy because I'm sure she has one even though it's rarely described in the books, no one can be completely without personality and I think you gave her the right one. She could easily have been like this had JKR ever choosen to write more than three words about her.
I also think your version of Draco was pretty acurate, I don't know who you intended 'the other girl' to be but it's Hermione in my head, because the things said about her and about Draco's feelings about this girl fits my picture of how he would feel about Hermione.
I did like the fact that you never mentioned her name though, that enables the reader to use their imagination or put whoever they want to into the role of the other girl.
I think this story stands better alone so I wouldn't advise you to make a longer story out of it, I like the fact that it consist of only once scene and somehow it makes the story deeper that there's nothing more to it, if you understand what I mean? Can't explain it any better.
Just to sum up things: I liked it very much.
/D i a Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much. I re-wrote this about a million times to get Draco right. This is how I've always seen Pansy, so she was actually not as hard to write. And the other girl is Hermione, I've always wanted it to be. I was going to make this another Dramione, but Pansy was going to be the main character. But I understand what you're saying - after awhile I've realized I don't really want to write any more. I think it might take away from the oneshot, you know?
Thank you so much for the great review! Report Review
This is powerful. I mean its really emotional. I never thought twice about Pansy except that she was sortof there.. and was annoying. This is the first time that I've ever felt bad for her. I enjoyed it your writing style flows really well! Who does he love?! Is it Hermione?Author's Response: For now, you won't know *says in mysterious voice* but if I ever make this a novel or something, then it will be revealed. Thank you, Lunnah, for reviewing after I said that on the forums. I'll have to look over your stuff too!
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Very good! I really, really like this!
10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you do! Report Review
Very good. I like it a lot.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
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