4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by The Claw of Raven Storms and Strange Arrivals

4th August 2011:
Great job! I'm very intrigued, because there are so many similarities to the tale of Harry Potter but it kind of sounds Tom Riddle-ish too and I'm sure you will add your own spin to it as well. I would've liked to see a little more content in this first chapter; I need a bit more to bite onto! One thing to think about: maybe try making your paragraphs longer. Having such short paragraphs really interrupts the flow of the story. For example, consider joining the 3rd, 4th, and 5th paragraphs. There are many instances like this throughout the chapter. Otherwise, can't wait for the next installment!

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Review #2, by Insert_Witty_Comment_Here Storms and Strange Arrivals

16th January 2010:
Hi! I'm intrigued by this first chapter, and I can't wait to see what's next!

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Review #3, by Scoobermaroober Storms and Strange Arrivals

26th August 2007:
I cant wait to read more! please update soon

Author's Response: Thank you! I only have one paragraph of Chapter two left to right, and it will be up as soon as it's validated ;)

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Review #4, by rowenaravenclaw94 Storms and Strange Arrivals

23rd August 2007:
is this supposed to be a partial harry potter-esque thing but backwards???

Author's Response: It's definetely Harry Potter =P Lyra's parents are main HP characters, but the mystery will be who they are...

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