You gave me inspiration reviewing my stories, so I thought I'd come and review yours! This really is so sweet and adorable, and it was nice to see a role reversal with Lily in control. In many James/Lily stories, Lily is slowly won over and feels like she is losing her mind. With James being the scared one, you turned the convention on its head. I also liked how you gradually built up the tension, and didn't just go for "I love you" right from the off which may have been tempting. I also love the simplicity of this - we don't need to know the backstory, how they got here, all we need to know is they are here now. I also liked how you made an ominous cloud hang over them; I always feel this is a vital requirement to a James/Lily story as we all know they are doomed to die so long. Others may rid the story of this element. You succeeded in capturing the mood perfectly. I can't wait to read more in the future! Report Review
That was honestly one of the sweetest stories i have ever read! It was awesome!! Report Review
What a cute little idea. Great job! Report Review
I love this very good usage of words!!Author's Response: :) Thanks so much. And thanks for the review! Report Review
Waw! So beautiful! They're perfect!Author's Response: :) Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you think that they are perfect; it is true that they are prefect for each other :) Report Review
So sweet and I really liked it.Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
it was so beautiful.
and very well written.
i love looking at the stars at night, although i tend to avoid swimming at night :]
this story makes me want to go outside and stargaze.Author's Response: I am pleased to hear it inspired you Report Review
Really cute! I liked it. Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
ah, that was sweet and wonderful and i loved it... the only thing is i wish they didn t say i love u like that.it just rushed it but other than that i absolutly loved it and hope u write more like it!Author's Response: Thanks. When I uploaded it to be validated, I thought that the 'I love you exchange' was fine. But while waiting for it to be validated, every one-shot I read (well, almost every one), there was at least one 'I love you'. I realized then that the exchange wasn't exactly right. The next one won't be like that. I can promise you.
And I can promise that there will be more. Many many more... lol.
Thanks for your review,
ActionEvans Report Review
Aww, that was beautiful!!
Fav!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Sweet and simple. Author's Response: That is how I wrote it to be. Thanks for the review! =) Report Review
beautifully written.(i think that's how u spell it) whatever. nice i liked it just stuff happened a little too fast don't u think? but beautiful! i loved it!Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! Yes, I do suppose it moved a little fast, but when I was writing it I was so excited about the idea... I guess I rushed myself... anyway, thank you soo much for your review! Report Review
awww, that was cute. 5 stars :)Author's Response: Thanks; I'm glad you think it's worth five stars Report Review
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