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Review #1, by dancer Intro

24th September 2007:
I'm not sure if I like to intro or not. It's sort of confusing with the sudden changes in POV and tense but I think it will turn out to be a good story.You might try using a little less dialogue and more description in future chapters. I'll look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate your honesty. I needed that criticism to become better.

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