good, but i've read better. thought that scopius was going to be in this. Oh well, off to the next story. Report Review
boats, not boots.
Writers an idiot. Report Review
your on to something here, it is a very good start...
almost fits perfectly with the book
It was good. Here's a little constructive criticism for you, work on your spelling of the words. It's a little choppy but I'll keep my eye out for more of it. Oh, can the chapters be a little longer? I like this story.
good interesting start to the story, a few spelling mistakes so you might want to have a reedit of that, coz they can be a bit distracting. but other than that! its good! keep going! Report Review
This isn't a bad story so far, but there are quite a few spelling mistakes.
Aile should be Aisle, boot should be boat, herd should be heard, Griffendor should be Gryffindor and Pavaty should be Parvati.
Keep writing, and make sure you keep an eye on your spelling :) Report Review
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