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Review #1, by Girldetective85 Not a Shadow

7th December 2007:
Hi Liz! Sorry it's taken me so long to review. :) Okay I'm here now! I did not hate your story, how could anyone hate it? First of all that's an interesting name for your OC, Shadow ... it's a good name for someone who's always in the shadows as you wrote her. I think you've written her situation very nicely, and it's easy to feel bad for her, since no one likes her and she's kind of a loner. Anywho I have a few pieces of criticism for you as well ... I know you said this was an introduction, I understand that, but I kind of wished you could have shown things that happened to Shadow instead of writing, you know, "In first year this happened..." and then "fourth year, this happened ..." Obviously like you said, it's just an intro, but I mean it would have nice to read some scenes from each of these years, you know? It's impossible to show everything, but maybe if you could have a scene from her third year when Draco locked her up and she was finding out who her parents were, etc. Just a suggestion! Also, Draco seems to have a lot of time on his hands and a lot of interest in Shadow ... do you think this is realistic? Draco's a very snotty kid. It's a little hard to believe that he would spend so much time making fun of Shadow and torturing her, when he comes from money and nobody even notices her. He would consider her beneath him, you know? But the scene with Pansy at the end was great ... I really think Pansy would stoop to that level and try to harass Shadow. And I love the "I am no longer anybody's shadow" ... she's becoming a stronger person and learning to stand up for herself, after all the crap she's taken all her life. All in all this was a nice beginning! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!
I see what you mean about Draco... will take that into consideration. =)


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Review #2, by kara101 Not a Shadow

3rd December 2007:
This is Hermione G from the forums

I am the first reviewer yay! I will not say I hate it because I loved it! The whole thing with her always in the shadow and how she could have been like Harry, Hermione, and Ron if people listened to her was realistic and a new perspective which makes you think. I can not wait for the story to "begin". Not any "BIG" grammar errors but a few are expected. I would not have noticed that it was your first fan fiction if you hadn;t said in my thread.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!

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