A very enjoyable story, it would be a shame to not finish it. Report Review
YAY! they finally kiss! LOL great job!
Harmony Forever!Author's Response: Sorry, i won't be continuing. I stopped midway through chap5, and the kiss scene was an extra scene i wrote awhile ago. Sorry. But thanks for reading, and i totally again Harmony Forever. Report Review
im sorry u dont want to continue. This was truly a great chapter. i give it a 1243/10. u r one of my fave authors and this has to be my most fave story. im sad to hear that this is not being continued but i hope that u keep writing. this is ilurvedannyr and im out.
~ildrAuthor's Response: You know, i don't think anyone is as sorry as i am right now, knowing that i was a favorite author for someone, and people really read my stories, and that im not continuing it anymore. Thanks for saying it was a great chapter, even though it wasnt complete... I guess the kiss made it great? that was my favorite thing to write. I hope so i can write one day. Another reason i stopped was because of school, i really gotta focuse this year! thanks for sticking with me and my fic! Report Review
Awe that last bit was wonderful. I'm sorry your ending this, but it's your call. You simply have to write more like this. I loved this fic.Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate you reading my fan fic. I'm really sorry for ending it, but, it's just something I gotta do. I really did enjoy the kiss scene a bit. The line Hermione says, Don't Ruin It, straight out of a movie and tv shows. If you think about it, it's not tht bad of a way to end the fic, with a kiss, but i Orginally didn't plan it like that. I'm ending the fic for now, but i will continue to respond to reviews. Thanks again for reading! Report Review
Oh Harry raising his hand to Hermione. Totally NOT like him.But i doubt he did it consciously. We all know he would never hurt Hermione like that.She lurves him too, that dance scene was so sweet. Those two are so made for each other, wish jk DID see that *sigh* Post soon pwease
Author's Response: Told you there would be OOC. Glad you think the way i do, but oh well. JK invented Harry Potter, so im guessing she has dibs on who to stick him with. Report Review
hehehehe Hermione crazy?.i'd actually like to see that, that would be so cool. well this chapter rocked. i cant wait till the next one, i give this one 10/10!
~ildrAuthor's Response: Haha your review is confusing.. why is Hermione crazy?... i'm so lost. thanks oh so much! Report Review
I wish that the next chapter would be available to read.
Genie: Your wish has come true.
I love thisAuthor's Response: Haha bout time too! thanks for reading! Report Review
Oh you could cut the tension with a knife, those two are so hot for each other. hehe. can't wait for The Whole Truth Is Nothing But A Good Excuse. post soon please. :)Author's Response: Theres the tension i was hoping for! Glad someone reacts like i want them too! aha. No offence to anyone. Honestly. Report Review
Yeah you totally messed me up with that "Hem hem" line. I thought at the beginning of the chapter that it would be Hermione downstairs, but then I was pleasantly surprised in thinking that it was Umbridge. I'm kind of disappointed that it wasn't. I know that is complicated to write, but then again it would've been nice to see that little twist.
You need to write their thoughts in italics or separate them somehow because right now their thoughts just flow into your narrative sentences which throws me off on what the viewpoint is.
It's way too early to have them near kiss! It's only the second chapter! Him blushing while they were packing together, them being in a house alone together that stuff was all good. But then when you got to the part where they near kissed I couldn't take it. It's only chapter 2! You've got to build that up a bit more.
I like it that Hermione schmoozes up to Vernon saying that she hates Hogwarts and all. The comment about how she's going to need to read Hogwarts: A History a billion times was cute too.
I'm sorry, but this chapter goes back down to a 7/10. The almost kissing thing was way too soon!!!
~MegAuthor's Response: Whoa long Review. Sorry it wasnt Umbridge. iT was just to confuse people, and to get them reading. I really thought about it, but i couldnt see why she would be there. Sorry if the thoughts were confusing. And thats why i cut things out of chapter two. it was way to early. I just built the tension between them. Report Review
Oo. It's Umbridge. But that's interesting that she's there. Ok now you've got me hooked. That was a great cliffhanger and good writing thus far. I'm happy that he's angry with Hermione's letter and wondering why he doesn't have any presents yet. It's all good pace.
I give you a 9/10. Definite improvement!
~MegAuthor's Response: Thank you! dont be too quick to think its Umbridge. The cliffhanger was intended to get people hooked. Glad it worked. Thanks very much about the writing.. Read on! Report Review
It's a good start to something...I'm not sure what that something is, but it's a start to it. By the way Hermione's eyes are brown not hazel. Little nit picky I know, but I can't help it. Anyway right now this story seems like the every old fanfic story. There's nothing that's really hooked me yet. I'm going to read on to see if I get the hook yet.
~MegAuthor's Response: I know I know. some else has already pointed that out. Sorry. Please read on.. Report Review
yay! thank you 4 updating ive been looking for this chapter. this is a great chapter! cant wait till next one. see ya!
~ildrAuthor's Response: Sorry it took so long! Hit a few validation complications. Ha that rhymes. Fourth one will be up shortly. Report Review
I really like it so far! I only have two complaints. One: sometimes your grammatical errors get in the way of understanding the story. When you wrote, "She said, as she pointed above where Harry and the mystery girl were standing," it reads as if there are TWO girls there. Maybe change it to, "she said, pointing towards the plant that was hanging over their heads" or something like that. Two: Hermione has brown eyes and brown hair. I know, it's not that big of a deal, but I am VERY picky about this sort of thing. Her hair's bushy, not curly... Remember, Hermione's pretty enough, but she's not drop dead attractive. ^_-
Aside from those small things (and even though I wrote a lot about them, they are definitely small) I really like it. The fluff left a cozy, warm feeling. :-)Author's Response: God, this sounds so cheesy, and really weird, considering i don't know you: I'm SO SO SO SO glad you like my fic:D. it means alot to me, since you're one of my favorite authors on the site. Well. You are my favorite author. Thanks for pointing that out! I never reeally noticed it, but now you mention it, yea your right. I know Hermione is bushy, but sometimes Rowling desricbes it as curly ( as she gets older her bushyness becomes curls.) But thats so much. I really apreciate it. Report Review
Umbridge ain't it? Author's Response: Maybe? I won't say. It could be Umbridge. It could very well be Hermione. But what about maybe Ginny? Cho? Or even Professor McGonagall? It could be ANY girl he has met at Hogwarts. What about Luna Lovegood? Keep your minds open everybody. Report Review
HMM HMM its Hermione isn't it.oh good please post chappie 3 soon.Author's Response: I'm extremely glad my cliffhanger has this effect on people. Who knows it could be Umbridge, or Hermione. or maybe perhaps... Ginny? Or Cho? Keep your mind open to who it could be. Chapter three might take awhile. I'm waiting for my oneshot to be validated, then i'll submit chapter 3, im currently working on chapter 4. but as soon as i can, i promise chapter three will be submitted. Report Review
Good start, me like on to more. Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter three might take awhile. I'm waiting for my oneshot to be validated, then i'll submit chapter 3, im currently working on chapter 4. Report Review
wow! i hope its hermione. pllz post soon, i think i'm hooked to your story, lolAuthor's Response: Haha. I'm sure everyone is hoping it's anyone but Umbridge. Because she means trouble. But whoknows. It cuold be. Or it could be someone other than Hermione... Ginny perhaps? and i'm flattered that your hooked on my story. Stay on the look out for my oneshot which should be validated soon! Report Review
I have one word for this story... AWESOME!Author's Response: Thanks so much! Report Review
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OH MY GOD!1 what the hell is she doing there! wow please update soon i wanna know what is going on w/ hermione?? 10/10Author's Response: Aha! I'm glad your as shocked as i wanted my readers to be. im afraid the cliffhanger will be a long one, chapter 3 is written, but i submitted a one shot, so chapt 3 is gonna have to wait untill my one shot is validated. Look out for both, and thanks for readin! Report Review
oh hermy's gonna get it when she sees harry!! great chapter!! 10+
~ildrAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! chapter three will be updated as soon as my one shot is validated. Check out for that too! Report Review
that was reall good.. keep the chapters comming! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter two is up, chapter three will wait, one shot is being validated. Really sucks only alowwed one unvalidated chapter. Oh well. Report Review
Great start! Carry on, cause you're realyy good at writing! Please update soon! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much! Chapter is up, chapter three will wait, utill my oneshot is validated, it really sucks only alowwed one unvalidated chap. at a time. Report Review
so far the story sounds good...and i LOVE mcr 2!!Author's Response: Well im glad :D. Chapter two is waiting to be validated, after which i will post a one shot, heavyly inspired by My Chem also. so be on the look for that! It really sucks i can only enter one chapter for any sotry at a time. Report Review
Recognized the title immediately, one of my favorite songs. So, will someone bleed? Nice start, I keep an eye out for more.Author's Response: One of my favorite songs too:D. Someone may bleed, but like i said, the song itself, the meaning of the song teenagers, doesnt have much to do with my fic. The title just worked. Report Review
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