I love this story! It's so well thought out, and you don't seem to be afraid to put in just how bad life at home for Severus was.
Please update!

 Report Review

I feel so sad for Snape! Excellent work, update soon!

 Report Review

great chapter
good emotions from both kids

 Report Review

love this story - can you emial me when you update it

brenda-wood@hotmail.com



Author's Response: LOL - sure! I'll be happy too! Thanks again for reviewing! Cheers!

 Report Review

good and considerated storyline despite of some minor errors.
Keep going!

Author's Response: Thank you so very much! I'm so glad you like it! I have lots more coming down the pike, as soon as it gets reviewed, another is on the way. Thanks, and keep checking! Cheers!


 Report Review

I hate to say it, but you need a beta. Your ideas are good, but you need to clean it up.

I adore this story. Please keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'll try and edit a bit more. I'm using word to type it, so... :P Anyway, I've already written the next chapter - just have to wait till it gets approved. Thanks and keep checking! Cheers!


 Report Review

I hate to start off with the bad news, but you need a beta. There were some spelling errors and confusing grammar that could've been corrected with a little more proofreading.

Other than that, good story. I hope you update this; I really want to see where you take this.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Sorry about the grammer/typos. My computer wouldn't let me use one for some reason. The good news is that there is another chapter on the way, and I did a bit more proofreading for it, so I hope you like it. Thanks for reviewing and keep checking!


 Report Review

aw. interesting twist about lilys dad. cute. kind of short chapter but i cant wait to see what you decide to do with this story and where you decide to run with it. im glad that you finally made an account and a story!! im already a fan :)

good job hun, keep writing!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! This story has kind of taken a lif of it's own - there are so many different places I want to explore - I hope I get to all of them. Thanks for reviewing, and keep reading. Cheers!


 Report Review

here i am!!! i love snape stories and i can definitely tell that this is one that will lead to the details of his life that were left out in the book. you're a really good writer.

i think you write the young snape very well. thats how i picture him too. hating his father and muggles in general. he kind of reminds me of the young voldemort. you know. with the whole, magic will make me better than them. ya know? i dont know if thats the angle that you were taking or now, but it worked. good job!!!

Author's Response: hehe - that was exactly the angle I was taking. Wait till you see how I tie good old voldie into this - he comes in around chapter 7 or so, and then he'll make a personal appearance later. Thank you so much for reviewing. Can't wait to hear what you think of the next chapter!
Cheers!


 Report Review

Aww what a great story, my poor Sev =(

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter - keep reading!


 Report Review

I am big fan of the Severus/Lily relationship and your version of describing their story is very appealing. Especially, the complex innerworld of sev is fairly illuminated.

Wait for your further chapters!!!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing. It is so nice to see you like it. There is another chapter waiting for review, and 12 more already penned. To be honest, though, I had given up a bit, since I hadn't gotten that many reviews, and my first one wasn't exactly glowing. The rest of the chapters contain quite a bit of humor, if I do say so myself, and actually are very much about how Severus relates to Lilly, and I was even trying to explain how Severus could, and did, turn to the Dark Arts. So, I hope you'll continue to read, and review!

Cheers!

 Report Review

I thought is was pretty rough too. But, then the penseive does paint a nasty picture. I like how Lilly fits in though.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I can't wait till the next chapter gets approved! I hope you like that too!


 Report Review

too violent

Author's Response: True. It is violent, but JKR gave us every indication that his childhood was a rotten, miserable experience. I only put thought s and words to the scene seh described in the pensieve of Order of the Phoenix. Thanks for reviewing!


 Report Review