Brilliant piece of work. I'm used to ramble, but this just left me speechless. Well done =)Author's Response: thank you!! :) Report Review
wow. brilliant. this is going on my favs. great job!
~Estrella Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm glad you like it! Report Review
My gosh. This was amazing. I've never read anything like this EVER. It was so..so...sad and yet, I felt like UGGH!! I can't explain it! You did an AMAZING job and I LOVED it. Ilovethoseboys. Those guys are awesome.
Brilliant job!! :D
Angela :)Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! :) *loves the Prewetts too*
Wow. Just... wowAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! ^_^ Report Review
Ah...absolutely, utterly expressive. Your style is fluid and brushingly close to poetic with the sweeping of your words and the shape they are put into, and the division of each sentence in a count-down to the final moment. As the title suggests, there is an atmosphere of constant motion - ever desperate movement of a wand, every moment of life. Or of life and defense.
"We", not "I." Two brothers working as a unit throughout, as one entity. That was one of my favorite details. It is not Gideon narrating, nor is it Fabian saying, it is not one acting. It is both of them, not alone, but together. Defying stillness together without fear for themselves. And it is that selflessness that gives them strength.
After two or three years of roleplaying Gideon Prewett, I really enjoy this piece of writing for its style and character. There is not enough credit to the Prewett brothers, and you do their sacrifice great justice. Wonderful, beautiful work.Author's Response: Wow! Thank you for such a great review! I actually really enjoy poetry so I guess that this influences my writing a great deal too. I'm glad you liked the fluidity of this piece, I wanted a sort of symbolism of the continuity of battle throughout the story, so I'm that this came through.
You're the first person I think, to pick up on the 'we' perspective. I love the idea of Gideon and Fabian fighting together, true brothers, always looking out for one another.
I'm glad that you enjoyed this story! I agree, the Prewett brothers aren't given the recognition that they deserve for all that they've done. Thanks for reviewing!
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