I hate Umbridge more than Voldemort even! But a great story - 10/10!Author's Response: thanks a lot MoonyLuvr1456! Keep tuning in, the next chapter will be up very soon! Report Review
Wow! Great story! I really enjoyed this. Everyone is so in character. From Umbridge to McGonagall and its really tough to wrte those characters because they are so formal but I think you accomplished it. Speech and behavior. Well done
What I would suggest is getting a beta if you dont already have one..you know just someone to proof read your fic and check for mistakes and spelling and such and just to help you brainstorm. If you need some help with finding said beta, lol just click on my page and then my Meet The Author page and drop me a post on the forums. Id really like to see where this is going. It has alot of potential so i want to see it be the best it could be!
kayAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review Kay! And sure...I'd love for someone to beta for me...I'll be so happy if you could...I'll just drop a post in your thread...thanks again!
Sairam :) Report Review
Wow. Well, I decided to check back on you as well! You really should finish up the last one, but this one definetely is a notch higher. I liked everything about it. Again, you've made the characters seem just like the ones in the book. That in itself is very good. I liked the riddle that eagle asks. There's something along similar lines in an ancient Indian script called the Mahabharat. Hmm. 9/10 for this one- there's always room for improvement. Good Luck and keep updating.Author's Response: thanks for the kind words. I'm thinking of changing the previous story into something different for the present ;). Thanks for reviewing and yeah I will improve on it Report Review
Hey, I can't believe no one's reviewed this. It's good, and I wonder why Dolores isn't in prison or dead right now.Author's Response: Thank you so much Graywand! I never realised that somebody reviewed my story.
Yeah, I know that Umbridge was not mentioned much except for her position in a brief part of DH. I thought I would re-introduce her and try my best on writing her at a hogwarts without dumbledore. Keep reading it, the other chapters are on the way! Report Review
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