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Review #1, by Nicolesmemories12 Detention

19th July 2006:
I love it i think itz good

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Review #2, by hermystwin Detention

25th March 2005:
That was sooo good please write soon.

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Review #3, by hedwiglovespig Detention

29th January 2005:
I liked that, it was good. Any more?

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Review #4, by kichan Detention

16th May 2004:
cant wait for the next chapter! update soon!

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Review #5, by purple_violet Detention

15th May 2004:
I really liked this chapter, though you kind of left us, as in a good thing, as in I CAN"T wat for the next chapter! And if you could check out my story, and leave a review! Thx!

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Review #6, by Christina Detention

4th May 2004:
This is really good keep it going plz!!

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Review #7, by Christina Detention

4th May 2004:
This is really good keep it going plz!!

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Review #8, by DragonGoddess Detention

1st March 2004:
I dont think I made myself clear ... But I Want Update! Really I tried to tell nicely you people dont listen so I have to abuse my reviewing rights to threaten! UPDATE!

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Review #9, by DragonGoddess Detention

25th January 2004:
That was ruddy cool! Update!

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Review #10, by Andrea Detention

19th January 2004:
loved it plz write more !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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Review #11, by Andie Detention

16th January 2004:
Great story! Don't forget to update! =-)

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Review #12, by ChocolateHorses Detention

14th January 2004:
Hey, good start... just a few suggestions! 1. I would try spacing our your paragraphs so they are easier to read. This also makes it look more professional. 2. Try to not have every sentence start with 'and then,' 'then' 'after that.' It gets very repetitive and you can combine some sentinces with a conjunction [and, or but...] 3. Instead of saying the strange thing every time you can say it. 4. Kind of like what I said above, try combining sentences so they are less choppy! I hope my advice helped and I am looking forward to you updating! ~The ChocolateHorse

Author's Response: Your advice helped much Thankz

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Review #13, by FoxySlytherin Detention

14th January 2004:
thanx for reviewing my story cool story needs more happening so ill check bak and see its progress!

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Review #14, by The writer of the year Detention

14th January 2004:
This story has a real good plotline but it needs fixing up.1. The stories rushed you never took time to set the scene and time and when they went into the forbidden forestthey straight away got attacked, You could of said that while they were walking to the center they heard ruffling sounds inside the trees, they started to walk faster and then suddenly got attacked.2. If you have microsoft word processor copy and paste your story in there first and do a spellcheck because you need to fix up your grammar and spelling.3. My last piece of advice is to leave spaces , you have stuck the whole story together but all in all it was an enjoyable and good story. It's up to you to take my advice and if you can please read and review my story called A Forbidden Love. Bunches of Love The writer of the year

Author's Response: Thankz for the review.

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