I listened to the song at the same time, and it all fit perfectly and it was soo sad and sweet at the same time, especially the ending!

Author's Response: i wrote it with the song on repeat, so i'm glad it worked! (: thank you very much! i am quite fond of the ending myself... (:

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Personally, I love this song. Absolutely love it. But it's so sad. Have you seen the music video that goes with it? I almost cried half way through for the old man. But, like your story, the music video ends on a better note. I love how you build up the suspense on who could be looking for Ginny. And then we're like, "But they're limping. It can't be him." But then he walks in!

10/10

Author's Response: it's such a beautiful song (: i don't usually like avril lavinge's music, but i couldn't resist this. and i couldn't finish the music video i was crying so much :3 i'm a weak silly emo, you see... maybe one day (:

thank you! (: i tried to keep the suspense and mystery up for as long as possible (:

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Like oh my gosh, you should write more!!! *throws a tantrum*

*sticks out tongue*

No, but seriously, I like the way you write. And I really wish this wasn't a one-shot. You've written Ginny very well. Though she is a little different than I imagine her, she's a awesome in this fic. So good job on that. Not many people writer her so well. Keep up the good work! ^_^

Author's Response: xD. thank you so much! this was always going to be a one shot, so i think i'll keep it like that. (:
thank you! :huggles:

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Hi, its norapotter. I don't know if you even remember but you left a review request for me a long time ago. I am so sorry for not reading your story sooner but I got so addicted to this sight that i kind of (don't kill me for saying this :P) lost my hp obsession for a time being. I guess it had something to do with the fact that all the books were over. Anyway, I needed a short break and that's why I wasn't able to read your story when you asked me to. I feel terrible, I apologize for not reviewing sooner.

Anyways onto your review. First of all: the opening quote (the one you use or your summary) is fantastic! Its beautiful and descriptive. Very descriptive. It leaves the reader with a perfect image of what's going on. Well done.

Infact this whole story flows with a richness to it that comes from your description. You do a wonderful job in setting the mood. The story is filled with descriptive language that really serves it well.

I did notice spelling errors though. For instance "Fred and George where sitting" i think you may have meant "were". However that was one of the few. So you did a really good job on that.

Oh and your conclusion was fabulous! You let the audience use their own brain to figure out who it was. A lot of authors assume the audience isn't smart enough and explains it to them. Some explanation is good but only to a certain extent. You know where its important to explain and where it can (and should) be left out. Good work!

You know, i just realized that I'm having trouble finding critique. Normally i can but with your story...i can't. You write wonderfully and therefore don't need much. I'm sorry I couldn't be of more help but that's the honest truth. Keep up the wonderful job.

-norapotter

Author's Response: oh, yay! :D thanks for reading and reviewing; it's fine (:. i'm glad you've returned! :D

thank you! i love first paragraphs that open with the setting because it - like you said - sets the scene. (:

thank you! and whoops. >.< grammer is a hate of mine, and spell check a love, and i must've overlooked things. D: thanks for pointing it out! (:

i love vague endings, that either imply what happens but doesn't go into details, or lets you make up your own. ^_^

thank you so, so much! :hugs: (:


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My friend doesn't understand why i love this song so much (i've listened to it over 300 times) but she'll never understand because she's not a Harry Potter fan. The main reason why i listen to it so much, other then it being a good song to being with, is because everytime i hear it i just picture this story in my head and it's so perfect that it never gets old and it still bring emotion. You are an amazing writer and you truly bring this song to life in a way that only Harry Potter fans will understand (and truly devoted Harry/Ginny lovers).

Author's Response: *blush* i'm sorry to hear about your friend but it's great to hear that you enjoyed my story. thank you! (:


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oh
that was great i think you should right a sequel to that it is a really good plot with alot of strong emotions. ReALLY good!
great job!

Author's Response: thanks so much! :)
sorry, no sequel. possibly. xD.


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wow, that was like seriously looking into a Christmas evening at the Burrow and into Ginny's head. It was very well written, obviously, and I loved all your characterizations and descriptions. The repeated phrases worked very well for this...ie. "She didn’t want to think, want to breathe, want to speak… she just wanted to feel nothing, to know nothing, to be nothing…"

The fic and the song go together very well and I think the emotion really came through. I felt so sad for Ginny, it was almost heart-breaking to see her slowly just break down because she was so frustrated, etc. Excellent job. :)

Author's Response: thank you! i'm glad i got the characterizations and descriptions right! i love writing repeated phrases; i feel it really gets the point across :)

first time i hear the song, it was in a car on holiday. i started crying and said, 'it's so harry/ginny!' xD. so, i wrote a fic on it on a later holiday when i had the song on my ipod :)

thank you! *hugs* and thanks for the +fav!


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Wow. this story is just flat-out amazing to the highest extent.

Author's Response: ^^ thank you! *hugs*


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This was such a great story!! I love this song and the ending was great!!

Author's Response: thank you so much ^^


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What a great story please don't abandon it but keep wirting!

Author's Response: thanks so much ^^
sorry, this was a one shot and always will be a one shot.


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Hiya, Mary! Here to review (per request). Oh, and by the way, before I start...we still need to have that house elf fight. :P

But onto the story. I love this song, by the way. It's very pretty. Your description is very good. It makes you feel like you're there; you can almost see the living room. I like the idea of Harry sending her a necklace for her birthday, especially the silver snitch. That's really cute. Ginny struggling with feeling vulnerable is understandable, too. You've written her so well. I just saw one typo the whole time. You have "Thank made Ginny care", and it should be "that". :)

The ending was great as well. I'm glad that you didn't keep it going after that, or else it would have lost some of the mysticalness. And ending it with the song lyric; that was great, too. I like this a lot, Mary. I'm supposed to be harsh, by your specifications, but I really am a sucker for your style of writing. It's flawless. Ginny was written very well, especially. I really don't know what to say, hun. You're really amazing. I should start reading Daddy Returned; I'm sure I'll adore it. So great job, and sorry for the crappy review! I'm just at a loss of what to say! Love it, keep writing, and I can't wait to read more of your stuff!

--Kenz.

Author's Response: hi kenzie! :] *hugs* house elf fight. *puts on to-do list*

so do i. but it makes me cry. first time i heard it, i cried. in a car. with people in said car.*hangs head*
thank you so much ^^
typoooo *cringes, then goes to fix*

it felt wrong to end it past that; i had the ending clear in my head the whole time. end it so that it was blunt and quick, but you knew what was going to happen.
yes, it's meant to be harsh! shame on you kenzie! *sticks out tongue*
*blushes* thanks hun ^^ lmao. be warned; first five chapters are cringe worthy.

no, thanks for this amazing review! did a little dance in my seat when i saw your name :P

thanks hun! *big hugs*


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that was, amazing!i wish there was at least 1 more chapter to it tho

Author's Response: thanks so much!!

once a one shot, probably always a one shot ^^


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simply amazing :D

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This was nice! The writing was great and the ending was very well done. You portrayed Ginny's emotions wonderfully. This was a very nice one shot. You had some spacing issues in the beginning, but that's all I could find. :)

Author's Response: thank you very much!

spacing issues? i'll check that out now ^^ thanks!!


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Aww! How incredibly sweet! I noticed a few typos, but that was it. You captured Ginny's emotions with perfection and I love how you left the end open ended, yet everyone knows who it is. :)

-Carrie

Author's Response: thanks so much!! typos... meh. it was late when i wrote this :p

thanks hun! i love leaving endings like that ^^


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i was listening to the song as i read this. It makes it ten times sadder. Brought tears to my eyes but none were shead. The ending is perfect!

Author's Response: oh no! don't listen to the song when you read this!

thanks so much ^^


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i was listening to the song as i read this. It makes it ten times sadder. Brought tears to my eyes but none were shead. The ending is perfect!

Author's Response: oh no! don't listen to the song when you read this!

thanks so much ^^


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oh my god, that was so good!!! i really felt for Ginny, DH never really went into how Ginny was feeling about Harry going away, so it was so sad to see it from her point of view.
is there going to be a sequel? lol.
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Author's Response: thanks so much ^_^

i know. i was hoping for ginny to play a bigger part, but oh well. beggers can't be choosers!

lol :] ... maybe. probably not. :] thanks!!


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harry! :) heehee

that was great *hits into favorites*

yay! continue writing, your stories are awesome...which you probably have realized by now...hee hee :D 10/10

Author's Response: iiittttttssss harry!! :]

thanks so much hun! *hugs*


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YAY, worth reading. Sorry for putting it off.

I want to be able to write like you

10/10

[♥] Rettopyrrah [♥]

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i love this.

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oh damn.
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i am crying.
so sweet.

i think you ended it perfectly.
beautiful.

Author's Response: sorry! [-gives tissues-]

thanks so much megan :]


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Ah! This was fantastic; so well thought out and written -- you certainly know how to set up the mood of the story, especially from the beginning (: I just simply loved this! It was a really enjoyable and delightful read. Kudosx5489320! Paisley.

Author's Response: thanks so much paisley :]

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OMG that was so good! I lve this story! This is my favorite one i read!

Author's Response: thanks so much! :]


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Awww! That was a really sweet ending. :) 10/10.

Author's Response: thank you :]


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