Your grammar and spelling aren't perfect, and there are a few things that I would have done differently, but overall, considering this hasn't been beta'ed, you've done really well. I do love the basis that this story was made on, I like the idea of a typical fairytale, one that everyone knows, being a prophecy, it's original, I think the only one I've ever seen really done is Cinderella, and that's slightly overdone, if you see my meaning. I love your characterisations of the characters we know from JKR and I love the way you've done the house-elves, and I like Stephanie, she frustrates me a bit, but I'm not sure why... Still, great work :) Update soon 8/10Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I started writing this story a while ago, so I'm sure that there are spelling and grammar errors because I wasn't really big on editing those sorts of things at the time I wrote it. I'm glad that you like the premise of the story. Means I did something right. And I really appreciate your comment about characterization, because that's what I like to focus on, although when I began writing this I wasn't very good at it. I'm not actively working on this story at the moment, but your review has inspired me to maybe start churning up the creative juices for this story. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
I love the idea of your story. It’s a really original idea and it gives the story that extra what alot a stories with Sirius in the main pairing don’t have. I was getting more and more addicted with each word I read in your story and I hope you will update soon! Thank God you didn’t make Sirius a womanizer so far. I hate it when people write Sirius like that. I’m curious when Hogwarts is going to find out when they are married and how they are going to react. I’m especially curious how Sirius’s family is going to react. That is going to be funny I think. I will definitely put this in my favourite list and I hope you will update soon! -xoxox- CleopatraaAuthor's Response: I'm glad that you're enjoying the story! I would have a bit of trouble writing Sirius as a complete womanizer, and I'd also find it difficult to write about a character who found a womanizer very attractive. Plus, it would bring up all sorts of issues that I don't really want to deal with. Basically I wouldn't like Sirius as a womanizer, so it's best to portray him in a way that I like, makes it so much easier for my characters to like him. As for reactions, well, they're going to have to wait for a while, as Sirius and Stephanie are both a bit keen on keeping their marriage on the down low. But not to worry, a reaction will come! Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
yay! very nice chappie. please update soon!!!Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it. And I have to admidt that I squealed when I saw that you reviewed for all six chapters. It really boosts my moral and inspires me, thereby increasing the chances of earlier updates. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
they need to start having an actual relationship.Author's Response: Yeah, married and not really having an actual relationship, that could be a problem. But remember, they've only been at Hogwarts for three days, you have to cut them a bit of slack. I promise that things will start speeding up soon. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
sirius better be nice to her!!!Author's Response: Oh, don't worry. The Sirius in this particular story is a surprising gentleman. But he is also a boy, so we can't expect him to be perfect. ;) Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
aaawww poor stephanie :(Author's Response: Yes, poor Stephanie. This was actually one of the scenes that motivated this whole story. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
sirius is so adorable :)Author's Response: I couldn't agree more. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
this is a really smart idea. very different.Author's Response: Thanks! I really love Sleeping Beauty, and I love Harry Potter, so there you have it. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
this is a really interesting idea! i like it! please update soon!Author's Response: Well, I'm glad that you like it. I have to confess that I'm not focused on this story right now, so updates are slow in coming. I'll do the best that I can though! Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Ok i have to admit i wasnt so sure about this story at first, but i am totaly sold. . . i really like it keep up the good work! i have a question about your banners, who is the girl/actress on the banner for this story and your mermade story? i think i want to use them for one of my story banners. . . thanks if you can let me know that would be great! amazing chapter keep up the good work!Author's Response: The beginning is a little shaky I suppose. I wrote it quite a while ago, as my progress on this story is immensely slow. And I'm afraid that I don't actually know who the girls on on my banners, as I didn't make either of them and I left the choice of who to put on the banner up to the banner makers. So you'd want to try to contact those who made the banners. _Martha_ and The_Dementer made the banners for The Mermaid and After She Awoke, respectively. Sorry I can't be of more help, I stay in the business of writing the stories. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Great Chapter! I just noticed u had added and im glad i noticed!Author's Response: I'm glad that you noticed too! Thanks for keeping up with the reading even when I don't update very quickly. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
I really enjoy this story! (: Good job!Author's Response: I'm glad that you like it. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!! What an amazing idea! I'm so stoked over this. update soon!Author's Response: Why thank you! I guess your confusion was cleared up. I really love this story too, but the writing's coming rather slowly, unfortunately. I'll do my best though! Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
im just a little confused, but i think I really like this idea. Dang. I don't even know what to say. This is really cool, but super depressing at the same time. XOXOAuthor's Response: Well, yes, the first few chapters are a bit depressing, but it gets better, I promise! And what exactly are you confused about? I wrote this chapter quite a long time ago, so I haven't been back and edited it recently. Hopefully the following chapters cleared things up for you! Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Great chapter! I love how Stephanie and Sirius' relationship is shapping up, I just adored their interaction during this chapter and I can't wait to see what will come next! When is Stephanie going to start talking to the rest of the Marauders? Are they gonna befriend her? Please update soon, I can't wait to see what's coming up!!!Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much! It is rather fun to have Stephanie and Sirius interact, even though it is a bit awkward for both of them. I'll update as soon as I can, but with college I've had even less time to write than normal. I'll do the best I can though! Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
I love this story please keep writing. I'd offer to beta or something but I don't have the time sorry! But to be honest the mistakes on your typing were not bad and didn't bother me so I think your doing fine. If I knew how to make this my favorite story I would but I don't know how to do that.Author's Response: Ah, that's alright. I'm glad that I didn't have any glaringly horrible typos or anything. Ah, an I'm glad that you at least wanted to make the story one of your favorites. You have to sign into your account to do that. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Really good, and I'm loving this story so far. A classic tale wit a wizard twist. Awesome!Author's Response: That's a good description of it. I'm loving writing this story, so I'm glad that you're enjoying it. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
OMG you wrote a new chapter thanksAuthor's Response: Yes I did write a new chapter, and you're welcome. I apologize for taking so long. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Very good chapter. You really build the whole anti-social thing well and its really realistic. I mean, some make make her go from one extreme to the next and all, but you do it very well. It was very entertaining, too, with the whole James/Lily thing thrown into the mix and its cute with how Sirius and Stephanie react with each other. Fantastic chapter.Author's Response: Yes, it's really hard sometimes to not go too fast, but I'm trying very hard to build off of the characters that I have now, and not where I think they should evolve to by the end of the story. Thank you for the compliment because that's something I've been working very hard on. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Wow this is a really original plot line! I got sucked into the story and now I'm waiting for the rest. I feel bad for Stephanie, she is going to have a tough year. What will she tell boys when they hit on her? It's a bit awkward to say that your married at seventeen.Author's Response: Haha, yes, it would be rather awkward to have to tell people that. I'm really glad that you're enjoying it. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
I really loved this chapter ( even if it was unbeta-ed)Author's Response: I'm glad that it turned out alright. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
This is so nice. I love how she see's the good in all, because no one could see anything of her. It's sad, but really well written. :DAuthor's Response: Yes, it's terribly sad, but that's the way it appeared in my mind, so that's how I wrote it. I didn't want Stephanie to have a pessimistic view of the world though, she's still got rather a lot of inocence. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
ooo A lovely little chappy there :DAuthor's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Lovely and classic Sirius :D Reading more.nowAuthor's Response: Oh, I'm glad that you like Sirius and his reaction and everything. He's hard to write for some reason. Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Knew it! Hahaha Aren't I a good guesser. Very well written and a great story! :DAuthor's Response: Yes, you're a very good guesser. I wasn't going for particular subtlety at this point, but thank you for the compliment and thanks for the review! :) Report Review
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