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Review #1, by joe the squirrel Quidditch

17th July 2007:
It's great that you started it with an action scene, most stories i read are extremely slow in the first chapter. I do wish it hadn't ended so soon.

The dialogue was nice, though a bit exaggerated in places.

Narration of more than just harry ron mione and malfoy, like harry watches the quaffle for awhile, would have been a good addition.

But wow you use excellent words: erupted, taunting frail.

Awesome -- don't stop

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I appreciate the time you took to comment. XD

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Review #2, by wazlibsgrl Quidditch

17th July 2007:
This is a pretty good story so far. Hmm, i wonder why Ron and Hermione are so mad at each other. i can't wait to read the rest and find out.
I noticed you had a few gramatical errors and typos, but other than that this is a really good story. update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you.

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