" Lemon drop?"
Haha, I have to say I'm looking forward to the next part :) Report Review
What's going to happen next?!Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review! This is only my first story, no less. Thanks for the enthusiam. I will update asap, or as soon as the site lets me update. *grumble, grumble* I can give you a little hint if you like about the next chappie. Snape finds out the truth about Hermione and stops being mean to her because of it. That is all I am saying. Report Review
This is really a very good story. I found a few errors that, if corrected it would make this a really Awsome story!!! Now, first of all Hermione's father is a muggle, so if Prof. Snape had used magic against him, especially ON HIM, then he would have most likely been arrested. Now, how many times have you heard Snape say "Thank you M. Pomphrey!" When he left Hermione in the hospital then he said THANKS!Ha!
As for the cussing, I'm not going to nag, because you'll get mad because then you'll say that "everyone does it", so I'll tell you to realize that all "those people" are in need of Jesus. I just wanted to remind you that you need to remember that Jesus is always watching.
I think that other then those minor details you story is very good. You have a good idea, only you left me at a cliff hanger!
I hope to see you soon! Keep writing!
*"Sarah" grabs a pencil and waves it in the air like a crazy person!!!*
You get a 7/10 (fix those things that I mentioned earlier and you will be a 10/10)Author's Response: Well, Sarah, there is a reason for the swearing, ever think of that? That is the way HG's father acts. Besides, as an answer to the thing about the ministry arresting Sev, Hermione is of age in this and the ministry sees that she is an adult in their world, that is why no letter appeared at the Granger houshold. I know about the mistakes, but I only spotted them once I let Granny Annie and my mum read the first chappie. Also, I already have a new story idea that I will tell you once school starts. You will find out in the next chappie why Sev said thanks to M. Pomfrey. Report Review
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