It's really great so far please continue the story, I'm dieing to know what happens next! Report Review
That was a great chapter short but great. Please update soon I beg of you!!! Report Review
Who saved her? I wonder. Poor Hermione having to marry a man she does not even like. Report Review
Great start!! I can't wait to read more. Please Please Please update soon! :D Report Review
Write more or else I shall snd my henchmen on you! Kee up the awsome work!Author's Response: I'll try, though I've been having the worst writer's block with this story. Report Review
Oh my God! I read this story back when I still havn't joined this website yet! I'm so glad I managed to find it again! It rocks!!Author's Response: YAY! I remember those days too, though I've had the luck of finding most of the stories I remember really enjoying.
that was pretty good. i like how it was kind of like the movie. will harry die, though? i just want to know. if you don't want to tell, ok. anyway, good story.Author's Response: To be honest, I really don't know. Report Review
I was wondering if this story was going to be completed, it quite good.Author's Response: Yes it will! I know it's taking ages (I seem to have hit a dry spell with my writing) but it will get done eventually. Report Review
There were a few wording and grammar issues here, which I'm sure your beta can take a closer look at. I'll focus more on plot and characters.
I do hope you plan on doing a bit more with Draco Malfoy. He's not really the suave, charming pureblood that fanon makes him out to be, nor is he the one-dimentional jerk. Draco can be an interesting character all by himself, so I hope you consider expanding his role. Obviously, plot first, but it's something to think about.
Overall, I'm not sure how well I like the Titanic/HP mix. I can't tell if you've just used the Titanic as a backdrop, or if the characters are going to be applied in the roles that were created in the Titanic film. Either way, I think you might be relying to heavily on pre-written work. You definitely have talent as a writer, so you would be capable of taking a very original turn with this.Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
"She sounded like a stuck-up person who found anyone below first class beneath her, and she hated herself for it, but Hermione felt her dignity had suffered enough lately, and that it would be best that, now that she had extended her 'thank you's, if she just left."
This sentence is REALLY long. You could think about breaking it up a little:
She sounded like a stuck-up person who found anyone below first class beneath her and she hated herself for it. Still, Hermione felt her dignity had suffered enough lately. Now that she had extended her 'thank you's, she just wanted to leave.
I'm a little bit confused about the whole set up of this story. Harry, obviously, is still famous. Is he still famous for the same reason? Are all of the characters the same, just pushed back a century?Author's Response: Thanks! I'll work on that Report Review
The chapters seem to be moving very quickly, jumping from moment to moment without much time for the readers to get a sense of the setting and the characters. The information that you do give is very clear and well written, so it seems to me that you wouldn't have much trouble fleshing it out a bit.Author's Response: I'll try to improve that Report Review
Hi. I am a VERY VER VERY BIG FAN of Titanic so I was of course reading it for similarities and so far I can say that you are doing a good job. :) You must also like the movie cause you are going along with the movie well and adding your own ideas to it. Creative and new. :)
I might critic a bit mean sometimes because I love Titanic so much, but don't worry I won't by down right mean . I'm not that kind of person. :) Don't be offended by anything I am and will write, I'm just adding my opinions. :)
PS I know it's my own choice to read this fic so I shouldn't complain. :)
PSS 10/10 Report Review
I know you've already acknowledged that the first chapter is a lot like the film, but a promise to be more original isn't quite as good as starting off on an original foot.
The problem is, because Harry Potter and Titanic are such culural phenomenons, you don't want to get sucked into just combining the two without adding your own spin on it. There are so many other things that you can do with the Titanic-- the tragedy of it goes so much further beyond just the fictional story of Jack and Rose.
Of course, I am preaching to the choir, right?
The only other comment that I had was that you might want to watch out for Hermione's character. Sure, she'd be bitter about leaving school to get married, but I don't know if you want to come on so strong, so fast. Because your chapters are very short, everything that you write within them is very important. It's a lot of pressure! Just be careful to balance out description, dialogue, sarcasm etc. When all we hear from Hermione is complaints, it weakens her as a character. She is a go-getter, after all.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'll try to work on that. Report Review
Wow. Very nice. Will be looking for the next chapter.Author's Response: Thanks! I should be done with that soon. Report Review
I've never seen the titanic. Is this a take off of it with a twist of wizardry? (I kind of saw the movie, but I do not remember the parts I saw, so...)Author's Response: Er, somewhat. I don't remember the movie much either, but some things are based off of it. Report Review
Hey, I always thought that if it takes a long time, then that means it'll turn out really good and I was right, that turned out great! I can't wait for the rest.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Titanic is one of my favorite movies, and, I must say, you have done an extremely good adaptation of it.
Though one thing bothers me. Is Harry going to die, just like Jack!?!Author's Response: Thank you!
He may, he may not. Report Review
I love this chapter. I like how it is to the point. Keep writing.Author's Response: Thank you! I will!
I love this story so far! I love it, I love it, I love it! Please write another chapter soon! I'll be waiting. LOL The Titanic rocks! [tears]Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try! Report Review
does Harry die cuz if he does that sucks, i mean i saw the movie and it is one of my favorites but still it sucks the man she loves diesAuthor's Response: You'll see. ^_^ Report Review
please write another chapter. i love it so far ill be waitingAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Great chapter but.(there's always a but isn't there? lol)..
Just after reading another review, i agree that there needs to be more info with the poker game. So i'll give you a hint, in poker the highest possible hand is an ace, king, queen, jack and 10.Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to see if I can write that information, but I'm still not sure I'll be able to do it. Report Review
It's good and I wouldn't know if it was like the movie or not, i've never seen it. lolAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
This is really good, I like it so far. Keep up the good work, and i can't wait for more.
AshAuthor's Response: Thank you! Though next month there won't be any updates, because I'm doing Nanowrimo! Yay! Report Review
More original. I like it!!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
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