Right, let me gather my thoughts first, because this fic requires a good review. :) First, I'll say great Job done here, you've described things really well, and as I've just followed it through from the challenge on the forums I think so far your's is the best.
I love the way you describe the rose then link it to Lily, and as i have a strong passion for roses I really loved it.
All i can say is you've done an excellent Job, only thing is you might want someone to read over it, just a few mistakes here and there.
Again great fic, I really enjoyed it.Author's Response: wow thank you! I had a lot of fun with this segment and I've been thinking on getting some work done on the next chapter. To be honest this started before the challenge with just the description of the Rose coming to me, I thought it would be great for a romance love story and I hope to use some of the same elements in an original fictions, but I discovered that it could apply to Lily so I thought I'd go that way see what people say on this first before I put more work into an original. Report Review
I love the poetic nature of this story/fic/oneshot. I never check to see what they are :P. Absolutely beautiful. ^_^Author's Response: aww thankyou so much I think this will be a mini fic if I can get up the gumption to write more I have about two paragraphs lingering on my laptop that I should look at again and continue on. But of course I have my Remus fic to write too. Chapter 8 is currently with my beta. Report Review
Wow! This is really really deep and meaningful! Keep up the FANTASTICAL work!Author's Response: Thank you so much! That has brought a smile to my face. Hopefully I can be as promising with the next chapter as I have been with this chapter! Report Review
this is getting really good. i am interested. please uppdate soon.Author's Response: Thank you very much I'll see what I can do. I have about a paragraph or two of the next chapter, I think it is a matter of sitting down and writing more to get it done. I might try and type some more today. :-) Report Review
Only just 500 words... But well done! =o) I love the rambleing... You really related a red rose to Lily Evan's well. Nice work. That must have been hard to write... So many words... I bet you used a theasurus. This is the first fic that has been submitted for the challenge that actually is about one SINGLE object and the 500 word bit dosnt stray off into other things. Though halfway through you did. But i liked it never the less. Umm.. Nice job. This is the best so far... Though iv only read 3 of them =o)
Carrot StixAuthor's Response: I've learned to ramble and I wasn't sure if I strayed off too soon or what I didn't pay attention I just wrote, but I'm glad I was able to get exactly 500 words... would you believe it started out as only a description of a rose that came to me one day and that was about 390 something words then when I read your challenge I looked again and thought that I could add more and then saw how I could make it a fanfic. Honestly I didn't use any source at all. *blushes* Thanks for the review. Report Review
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