No offense, but running things through spellcheck never actually killed anybody. I've noticed a couple spelling errors...okay, a good number of spelling errors, and they're driving me nuts.
The concept is fairly good, though you have a couple of flow issues. Slow down a bit. The story is moving along way too fast.
6/10, I'm afraid.Author's Response: Hi, i'm really sorry about the spelling thing! You see i am dyslexic and ADHD and ADD and loads of other problems, this means my brain hasn't grown proply for my age. (still young). plus i only learnt how to read 4 months ago and at fourteen and not being able to read is very imbarrasing. i am tought myself how to read in the summer so i am teaching myself how to spell. i m working REALLY HARD to get my spelling up to scratch and i will try and do better in the next chapter. i do run things through spellcheck but my spelling is so strange that the laptop dosn't know what to do so... thankyou very much for the reviwe and take as constructive crittesism.
so you obviously hate Ginny lol
Ginnys my fav charecter though, you know what I think about Harry/Hermione but the Neville/Luna parts were sweet... put more of them in!
cya tomorrow and don't leave us!! =[ you know what I mean ! Report Review
Good job with the Ginny-bashing. Update soon, please. Report Review
i soo cannot wait to see wuts up next neville n luna r so cute togetha n harry n hermione also luk cute togetha! =) Report Review
Awww neville and Luna! SO CUTE!
good chapter Elenor but I still can't stand Harry/Hermione- sorry!
If you want to have a look through my stories feel free :D
see you at school!Author's Response: You will come around lotti, you will but you gotta keep readin and you'll see they were ment to be. see you at school
this is charlotte from school, I just read your story and it is really good so far! you know I don't like Harry/Hermione pairs but i just thought I'd give this a read :)
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haha, there were some funny parts in this chapter. humer is good to lighten up the mood of the story. there were a FEW spelling errors...most commenly 'tow' is spelled 'two'. but i still like the plotline!Author's Response: hi thank you for your comments! sorry about the spelling. you see I only just learnt how to read properly and so the spelling should get better, hopefully. I also have the added problem that I am dyslexic aswell so i'm making extra effort to spell things as well as I can. hope my spelling is better for the next chapter. thanx for the comments again! bye!!
nice start...me likey!
but...it kinda has to be a wee bit longer...i know, im a hippocrite...but it would really grab readers attention if ur first chapter introduced who everybody was and if they were OC or not.
i liked ur description, something i lacked when i began writing. but it kinda needs to flllow. urs is just a tiny bit choppy.
anyways.i think u have a great story on ur hands! Report Review
hey, good story line, but well, theres no nice way to say this really, ummm... you might want to check your spellingAuthor's Response: Hi, thank's for reading the chapter. I'm sorry about the spelling. I'm dyslexic so i can't read or write propely and my brain cannot remember spelling pattens and stuff. but i'm working on the spelling for chapter 3. thank you again. buy, xxx Report Review
Nice chapter. A little on the short side. It is spelled 'Avada Kedavra'. Keep it going!!Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I will take the spelling correction in to account. Thank you again and I will try and get the next chapter out asap Report Review
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