omg, that's really (gonna sound nerdy) moving. it's really powerful. having a hard time describing it, except that its really REALLY good
-nat

Author's Response: Reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeally? Awh, thank you so much! That was a good move to push me to write the second chapter. :]

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i like how you write thoughts rather thoughts and they way you wrote it is really realy effective to know whats going thru peters head like that hm i hope you arfe adding the four piints of view :)

its sort of like poetry the way you wrote different to anything i have seen on here let me know if you up date this please

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Dom
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Author's Response: : ) Thank youuuuuu!
I shall do just that.

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Wow. Very deep thoughts.

Author's Response: : ) Yes, they areeee

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WOW! :o LOVE IT! :) I really like the format you wrote it in, if you know what I'm trying to say. I like how you dragged the word 'betrayal' throughout the story. And I like the DET thing, that's pretty cool. I really like the story, and I like the beginning A LOT. Happy writing! :D

Author's Response: : ) Awhhh, thank you so muchh! I'll try and get a new chapter out soon!!

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Very good, i like the idea of having four seperate chapters to describe four seperate people.

Author's Response: : ) Thank you very muchhh!

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