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Review #1, by _DearMyLove_ Draco's Arrival

13th September 2009:
Awh that was so sweet! I loved how...human you made Narcissa and Lucius. Just for that moment they were not Death Eater and wife, but anxious parents...especially Lucius. And yet there were vestiges of his darker side, especially when he threatened the man behind the desk at St Mungos.

The way Lucius reacted was exactly how I pictured him: finding it very hard to just let the Healers get on with it without butting in and trying to do things himself. I also liked the bit when he saw Narcissa after waking up and immediately thought she was going to die because he had no knowledge of what childbirth was like.

The weakest part of the story, I felt, was the beginning. There was a lot of tension built up in the first paragraph because Narcissa was alone in the house...and then Lucius appeared right on cue. It might have been nice to expand it a bit so that Narcissa was on her own for longer, perhaps with her trying to contact St Mungos and being unable to or something.

Overall I thought this was a really sweet oneshot that showed the relationship between Lucius and Narcissa really well. And baby Draco at the end was so cute! :D
8/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I really appreciate your comments. You're right about the beginning; I guess I just went ahead with the plot because I didn't want it to get tedious. I'll try to think of something else! I'm a bit tied up right now though, because I'm working on a one-shot about their wedding.
Anyway, thanks for reading! I'll be checking your page for updates, too. :)


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Review #2, by Prongs the Marauder Draco's Arrival

11th August 2007:
Aw, little Draco sounds so cute. I love all your stories so far!

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback! Have you written any L/N yourself?

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Review #3, by xbetter unsaid Draco's Arrival

30th July 2007:
This ending nearly reduced me to tears! Very nice writing. Intensly one of my personal favourites.

Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad you liked it! I love those Malfoys....:)

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Review #4, by KML Draco's Arrival

13th July 2007:
Great story! I have a sort of fascination with the Malfoys and Professor McGonagall myself, so I love to read stories about them. I think Lucius and Narcissa's relationship can take on so many different tones, and you write this one particularly well. I don't like to repeat myself, but I can't think of anything to say other than you've written a fantastic story!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Positive feedback is always so encouraging! Have you written any L/N stories yourself?

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Review #5, by UtopiaAnonymous Draco's Arrival

8th July 2007:
Simply BEAUTIFUL!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Have you submitted any stories yourself?

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Review #6, by evil_toothpaste Draco's Arrival

6th July 2007:
Very Nice. I enjoyed that alot!
Please review my stories too!
-Evil_toothpaste

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Review #7, by fendiaddickt Draco's Arrival

5th July 2007:
good job:]

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Review #8, by Andromedatonks Draco's Arrival

4th July 2007:
Oh, that was sweet and very well-written, all the emotions in place. I loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

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