4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by theblacksisters The Final Battle

3rd October 2013:
You've definitely got the right idea. I suggest adding more description and punctuation. The dialogue and description leave a lot to be desired, but if you fix that up, this could be really good.

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Review #2, by Arcane The Final Battle

20th August 2007:
This was really depressing.
It was good, but could have used a lot more emotion.

Author's Response: I will probably rewrite it and add more.

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Review #3, by I OWN VOLDY The Final Battle

17th July 2007:
That was...interesting...
Over dramatic though

Author's Response: Thanks,

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Review #4, by MarauderxMistress The Final Battle

17th July 2007:
Wow, not much of a happy ending, eh?

I was dying of laughter from this, "I want you dead. Avada Kadavra."

It was just something I found hilarious.

Author's Response: Thank You.

I really don't like Happy Endings LOL, jk

Well anyway thanks again.

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