Ok, I seriously love this chapter, I think that a cafe, without cupids and confetti, is a very wonderful idea, followed by a night of dancing is romantic as hell!!
I have only one complaint, and it's not very big. I don't like that you keep calling characters by other than their names. Like when you call Tonks the bubble-gum pink haired girl, or the metamorphagus. It kinda distances the reader from the character giving the impression that she's not that important. My suggestion is use names or pronouns, never titles, unless the character isn't important or really significant.
Other than that, 10/10. I love it!!!
LaivineAuthor's Response: Thanks for the suggestion, it's that I haven't been writing to this fic in a long time, Laivine. I'll change it soon, don't worry.
Thanks for coming around again. :) I missed your reviews.
(Sorry about your computer though!)
~Meli Report Review
Hey how have you been? I'm sorry for not being able to review, but my internet was cut off, and then the pen drive where I had my stories was stolen, so I've had to rewrite the whole thing. I really like your story, by the way. It's really good. :D Didn't expect anything less, though.
LaivineAuthor's Response: That sounds worse than my loosing my files... I hope that you get better. When will your fic update?
Viv says hello, by the way. :D
Your writer & reviewer,
~Meli♥ Report Review
I think that she should become something in the Magical Law Enforement Office. And they should...hm...either head to the beach and go to a cafe there or go to a nice, not fancy but nice, resturant.Author's Response: Hmm... very good ideas, girly1393... I just need to find the right song... do you think I'll be by Edwin McCain is a good one? ;] I'm just thinking about it... (I'm listening to all my favorite love songs so that I can choose one for the next chapter... the second date of course. :D)
Thank you for your very good review, girly1393. :]
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i loved it! it was fun to read and hard to tear my eyes off of!Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, girly1393!
Hopefully the computer I have all the chapters in will finally start to work...
P/s: I'm going to be gone for 5 days... I'm very sorry, but I have IB Art homework to work on and a trip to go some where (Florida). Report Review
I love this chapter!!! It's so cute! I love the way you started this story with the ending of VSG. It's almost like the last story didn't end, cause it was only the beginning. *scratches head* does that make sense? Anyway can't wait for more!!!Author's Response: Awesome and thanks for leaving a review, faithful Laivine! How'd the party go (Her Quince)? Tell me about that later if you can.
P/s: *working on next chapter* Report Review
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