It's a really sweet story. I love that it doesn't go on too long like so many fan fictions. A great idea, only thing I'd say is that you should try to punctuate more - I mean, commas would have really made it clear, and emphasise what you are saying. Great story though! well done! Report Review
Dude that was so sweet eh i am a girl not a gay boy :p not that there is enything wrong with them!
Sorry just had to get that off my chest.
The story was brill i'd say:
That is the first story i gave 5 stars for and 10/10 it must be an honor :D ha ha ha ha sorry mate i love to joke! Report Review
Umm...you really need to work on your sentences. They all blend together and don't make much sense. Report Review
Brill i loved it,it was GRAIT! :) Report Review
Hmm... He comes on a little strong. Very rushed I think. Maybe re-edit and take your time with Remus's reaction. Nice little idea though. ^^
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