hmm. the poem was good. but the story would be nicer if it was longer and more detailed.

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I think that you should leave the rest of the story unbolded. It was a great plot line but a bit fast don't you think. Draco wouldn't just give in to her and let her kiss him. He'd probably use it against her at first. Good start though.
~Aly

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aww...u should write more! its really good!

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aww that was cute =]

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That was really good! I loved what Hermione wrote in the beginning! That was really well written. That makes me think that you have written many poems before this. As for your rating, 10/10!

Author's Response: Oh why thank you very much. In fact I have written some poems before this, but this is the only one I have written a really short story to go with. Also it helps when you have a another writer in the household, like me as I was growing-up my mother wrote alot of poems. In which My mother & I still have all of them.

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i think u should continue

Author's Response: Well I really have more stories am still working, I really ment for this to be a poem at first but when I went to go post it the story bit came to me like lightning hitting me. But once I got done with it I thought I'd stop it there. For now that is......(Smirks at the thought of what to make Malfoy do. Hmmm...)

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