um, your story is really weird, no offense or anything. you have alot of spelling mistakes and it seems like you make your character seem so amazing. try to be realistic. and your story doesnt flow very well either. use transition words! fix those things and your story will be alright.

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again, your story is boring. i know its just the first two chapters but the way your going this story isnt gonna be so well. please check your spelling and dont make rebecca seem so amazing. that will bring your story down...also add more detail. sorry for the harsh review.

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um, your story is really weird, no offense or anything. you have alot of spelling mistakes and it seems like you make your character seem so amazing. try to be realistic. and your story doesnt flow very well either. use transition words! fix those things and your story will be alright.

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hey casey granger? You left me a review offering to do a banner for my story"through Ginny's and Harry's eyes. For information just email me at oblack_@hotmail.com

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Pshaw!!! Jeez chick. I didn't realise your grammer was that bad. I'll copy it to word and do the grammar changes and send it back to you. See ya tomorrow dear.

Rose

Author's Response: working on it, plus added a banner

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Yo, Casey! I'm working on the edit of this, but I must say, your grammer stinks. I also was working on a new sorting hat song, though I stink at poetry and all that stuff. anyway, keep writing!

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cool story!! It is interesting about the visions that Rebbecca has.
1000/10
~-~-Hannah-~-~

Author's Response: Ya, me and my friend are redoing the first chapter now and we are both working on the second too. The visions will be explained! Stay tunes.

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