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Reading Reviews for Forbidden Love
  
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by xXLuna_LovegoodXx Talking Hats and an Angry Dad

15th July 2007:
Ahh! This is a great start to the story! Can't wait for more! And I know this line probably wasn't meant to be funny but I found it hilarious!!! 'Sometimes I wish he would just ground me or something'...it rocked!!

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Review #2, by bubblyblonde Talking Hats and an Angry Dad

5th June 2007:
Very nice first chapter! it kinda seemed a little choppy at times but I liked it...im inteseted to see where this goes next!

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Review #3, by elvengirl Talking Hats and an Angry Dad

5th June 2007:
Good start.
However you seem to mess up with using first form and third form.

Example:

Eris collapsed on the ground. The pain spread through her body. Sometimes I wish he would just ground me or something.

See, once you use "I" and "me" and the other time it's "she" again.

Other than that I love the plot.

Erin Puzzle... I love the name. ;)

Elven

Author's Response: Italics are thoughts. I probably should have mentioned that: thanks!! :D

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Review #4, by coolchick Talking Hats and an Angry Dad

4th June 2007:
i like it!
u should keep the story going!
10/10 all the way!

Author's Response: XD

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