wow. my first sirius/lily and my first one shot. I am so impressed. this is some fantastic writing! Report Review
Aww!! That was so sad. This is the first Sirius/Lily fic I've read and I really like it! Report Review
Oh! That is so sad, I love it. Report Review
aww, poor sirius! i really felt for him in this one.. especially at the end when he erased the affiar from her memory! awesome song to base it off of btw. i love both versions of it.
-allieAuthor's Response: It's one of my favourite songs. I adore the Johnny Cash version. And this piece only came together because the song kind of ... slipped it into place, if that makes sense. Thanks! Report Review
I love the song The Long Black Veil. It's amazing. I was thinking of doing my own songfic with it so I searched to see if anyone had beaten me to it (luckily I was thinking Narcissa/OC rather than Sirius/Lily!). And by the way, it wasn't actually Johnny Cash's song originally, it was written by a guy called Danny Dill and Cash just covered it. You should listen to the Mick Jagger/Chieftans version, it's brilliant!
Speaking of brilliant, I really really enjoyed this story. Although I love Lily/James I've always been intrigued by the whole forbidden love thing between Sirius and Lily. I really felt for Sirius in this fic. He knows he'll always be second best. Your writing is great, well done! :)Author's Response: No, Johnny's haunting baritone fits the song so unbelievably perfectly - beats out Jagger any day. Though I do enjoy both. And I didn't know who wrote it, thanks for telling me.
I think the forbidden thing is one of the reasons I found this fic so easy to write, it had that whole not-allowed-hate-ourselves-for-it angsty vibe which I loved.
I'm really pleased that you enjoyed this. Thank you so much for taking the time to review. Report Review
I liked your story, it was really sweet and sad. But that ending just made it brilliant. Almost shedding a tear at how sweet Sirius is in this story. Great writing :)Author's Response: The accidental ending that people keep praising me for. It wrote itself, really. But I'm glad you enjoyed it nonetheless and thanks for reviewing. Report Review
What a brilliantly written story! I've so enjoyed reading it.I am beginning to accept Sirius/Lily stories, I haven't really read them much before because I have been so wrapped up in other ships but I'm beginning to like the angst involved in the L/S ship.Excellent job, thank you! xxAuthor's Response: No, thank you for the review. I really appreciate you taking the time to leave it, and I'm sorry it took me so long to respond. Report Review
*sniffles* This was so so so sad *pouts* You know it should be a crime to write such sad stories. But seriously this was such a moving story i still can't believe how amazingly beautiful this was.
Even though i'm a huge follower of J/L and i don't like seeing them with anyone else but S/L is an exception lol :D It was just amazing the way you portrayed Sirius's remorse and his feelings were so clear. The way you expressed their feelings was touching. Great writing and i absolutely loved the plot. Wonderful Job. 9/10
~AmieAuthor's Response: I hope the missing point in my final score is because it's not James/Lily :p I'm not a Marauder era fan myself, so hearing from someone who likes those characters that something I wrote about them was good means a lot. Thank you so much. Report Review
"Nobody knows but me."
Wow! That's really about all I can say. Wow! I find your stories to be very moving, and this one especially so.
~DougAuthor's Response: I wasn't sure I'd do any good with Sirius/Lily ... or the Marauders in general. But I've received only positive responses, so I suppose I didn't do too badly ;)
Again, and I really think the word isn't enough, thanks, Doug. Report Review
You know, your stories should carry a warning label. "Tears may ensue... Do not read at work." It was amazing. Yes, I'm an avid James/Lily supporter but I do like reading different stories from time to time. This one was amazing. You really pull out Sirius's loss. He lost the girl he loves to the man he loves more than himself. It's just so sad and yet you made it so believable. Very well done.
~CrystalAuthor's Response: Haha, next time I right a tearjerker, I'll try to remember that warning. I'm not really a Marauder fan; I rarely read them and it's even rarer that I write them, but I am very proud of this piece. I love the way it turned out. And, as always, Crystal, I loved your review. Thanks. Report Review
Wow, what a great story! I am a huge supporter of Sirius/Lily and I think you did this so well. I love the memory charm at the end, very nice original touch.
I love the way you show the night before and then the Wedding day, but from different perspectives. It was great, well done! And I love how you included both of their loyalty, particulary Sirius. Loved it.Author's Response: I myself, not really a Sirius/Lily fan. Not a Marauder fan at all, if I'm being honest. Oh, and I can't take credit for the memory charm, it wrote itself before I even knew what was happening ;)
I did it from two different perspectives because I felt that it was a story that needed to see both of their feelings on things ... and well, I really couldn't write the wedding day from Lily's point of view as she didn't know what had happened anymore.
I'm so very glad you enjoyed this, I'm quite proud of it. Thank you so much for taking the time to review. Report Review
Hey, the ending of thgisw chapter was wonderful, i mean it was so terific!Author's Response: Thank you, but I should point out this isn't a chapter, but rather a whole story in itself. Report Review
omg!! i love it!!
i never expected the twist at the end, that is so sad! =[
i love sirius and lily stories, they're a good pair.
10/10Author's Response: I myself am not a big reader of Sirius/Lily, so when it comes from someone who loves the pairing, a positive review means all the much more. Thanks! Report Review
Wouah! That's so well-written. Amazing! An awsome piece of work. 10/10 of course!Author's Response: I do try to write well ;) Thank you. Report Review
wow ur story was so gd! i almost cried! *tears* 10/10Author's Response: I'll have to work harder next time then, to ensure I get those tears ;) Thanks a lot! Report Review
that was excellent but what was the end bit?. did Sirius make Lily forget what they had together?Author's Response: Yes, he did. Thanks for taking the time to review! Report Review
oh my..so sad..Author's Response: But in the good way, yes? Thanks! Report Review
I wasn't sure about it to begin with because as you can tell by the name I am into the big happily ever after thing but that ending was one of the best I have ever read it was so sweet.Author's Response: Ha, yes, your name does give away your preferences. I'm very glad you decided to read it still and even happier that you ended up enjoying it. Thanks for taking the time to review. Report Review
Its a great story, its well written and I like the whole plot. I adored your descriptions and well done. 9/10Author's Response: This is the kind of review I love, the ones that tell me exactly what you liked about it. Thank you so much. Report Review
That was amazing. the ending was so unexpected, but amazing!!!Author's Response: I'm proud of that twist, so thank you! Report Review
Oh god, that crushed me at the end. I knew there was more to it than that when he kept talking about ''making the right choice this morning'' and there it is. Absolutely shocking and just so angsty and sad, I couldn't believe my own eyes. It was brilliant but brilliant in the way that only slow tragedies can be.
And the descriptions of the white veil and how he looked at Lily as she went down the aisle were just so greatly done. You are a writer with a paintbrush in your hand; forming masterpieces.
I'm probably never going to forget this story. There's plenty enough made by the love of Sirius and Lily but none that will be encased in my memory as this one.
Thanks soo much!Author's Response: I was going for tragic, and I'm very happy that the ending shocked you, I'm extremely proud of that little twist and do love it when my reviewers comment on it.
Your words have managed to make me blush, not an easy feat, and since all I have to give in return is a heartfelt thank you, that's what I'll give.
Really, I mean it, thank you so much for this wonderful review. I appreciate it more than I can say. Report Review
OMG! That was bloody brilliant! Never has a story torn me so! Great job! I really love it!
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The DamselAuthor's Response: I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review! Report Review
wow wow wow so goodAuthor's Response: That'll do. Thanks! Report Review
This was a fantastic story! Very well written and the ending was just tragic enough. Perfect!!Author's Response: Just tragic enough? I like that. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you. Report Review
That was a great story. I hope to read more of them.Author's Response: I hope you read more of them too. Thanks a lot! Report Review
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