No matter how I try to get this out, it's going to sound rude, and for that I am truly sorry, it's not my intention.
This is a horrible ending to an amazing story. I feel like you just kinda gave up at the end. And i read your squeal. It's more of parallel companion. I hope when you're finished you write an actual sequel, however short it might be, about them in the afterlife. Because this was depressing. I really did enjoy this though, except for the ending. Report Review
I actually enjoyed the Snape/Tonks moments. I really believe people don't give him enough credit. It's as if they just see a Professor, a Death Eater, a Traitor, and a brokenhearted man who died for love. They don't go looking for an actual person. Personally, I think Snape has so much more to offer.
On an unrelated note. As an author, have you ever thought about Snape and Bellatrix together? I think they're perfect for each other. Actually, the way you described Tonks 'feelings' towards Snape pretty much sums him and Bella up, for me at least. Report Review
Ew. Ew. Eww. Moody is gross. How could you do that? EW! Report Review
I love that in her dream Moody gave her Veritaserum to see if she liked him or Remus more! Ahhaaha! Report Review
Are you eventually going to have her all gloomy, the way she was in HBP? Because I think that really adds to their relationship.
Ooh, I'm so happy, I really love Remus/Tonks! Report Review
I love Remus/Tonks stories, I think that they are just super beautiful, and I can tell I'm going to love this one! Report Review
*breaks down crying* Why did REMUS have to DIE?!?!?! Why did Tonks have to be there. ARGH! The Tonks/Moody thing and the Snape/Tonks thing totally freaked me out, but why why why why WHY did Remus DIE?!?!?! Report Review
I really love this story. It's become one of my favorite fanfics! It's sad they died, but then again you warned me.
I can easily imagine those things happen in the books. Well done!
I'm curious about your sequel. I'm going to read it now :) Report Review
hey guess what? i finally know what peaky means!! haha i'm sooo proud of myself. in my defense, its uk slang and i'm an aussie who only lived there for four years... Report Review
it all fits perfectly
perfect 10Author's Response: Thanks, this was definitely a hard one to write. I had the idea a few months before DH came out and got it all out there before its release. Report Review
Good story. Quite enthralling.Author's Response: Thanks. There's a sequel if you're intersted. Report Review
As I begin the last chapter I just remembered the title of the story and that you started off saying Lupin was dead. Somehow through the subsequent 22 chapters I managed to forget that little tidbit of important information. I am now growing sad at the fact that somehow in the last chapter he is going to die. By the summary I really hope it isn’t in the way that I think. Ok…now to actually read it.
Eee he finally proposed!! That was such a romantic way to do it.
Haha, I love Ted Tonks. He’s so funny.
Dawlish a Death Eater? I somehow didn’t see that one coming. Poor Remus!
You suck! Lol…why’d you have to kill them? They should have grown old together and had lots of babies!
“My crime was simple; I lived to see my lover die.” – That is the absolute saddest line ever.
Ok, you don’t really suck. Well you do a little but this was still one of the best fics I’ve read. It’s in dire need of proofreading but content wise it was beautiful, gripping, compelling, etc, etc.
Author's Response: I totally agree w/ you about the proofreading. I'm horrible at it as I know what I was thinking and correct mistakes in my head.
^_^ You know there's a sequel-thing.
Thanks so much I"m glad you liked it. Report Review
Questioning? I’m quite confused...ok the confusion vanished. And McGonagall comes to save the day…yay!
Hm…how did they know about the Order I wonder?
Aw, Remus is done being a prat…or so you are leading me to believe. The Farah thing is quite clear now. Oo Molly Howler…scary those are.
They suspended her?? They suck!
Oo the last chapter awaits.
Author's Response: I'm guessing that Scrimgeour has people working on intelligence and whatnot.
Thanks :D Report Review
Yay! She punched Dawlish in the nose. I really don’t like that man.
I like how Bill is ok with Charlie being with a man.
Haha, I like the ugly stick reference.
Tonks seeing Fleur and Molly’s row and watching her thought process about Remus was well done.
Oo the end approaches. *reads *
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I struggled with this chapter like you wuldn't believe. Report Review
I like how Remus protected her from the other people. Aw, cuddling, cuddling is nice.
Lol…Savage is bi? That came out of nowhere.
“Somehow a letter saying “Dear Charlie, Would you shag me if I had a wank? Love, Tonks” didn’t seem appropriate.” – Omg! That is sooo hilarious!!
“Tact was not strong among the Weasley men.” – Lol, in some cases that is a dire understatement.
Charlie is bi too, or is he just gay? Whatever, it’s a cool little addition anyway.
Freckles held Remus’ scent for quite some time, huh?
Author's Response: lol, i thought it'd be interesting :D
I think he and Savage swing both ways :D. Report Review
Ok, I did my background reading. Haha…I know a guy named John Thomas… Aw, the scruffy stranger was nice. I like how you related it back to something from canon.
Oo, enter Charlie…this should be interesting. And again with the fandoogling. Oh this is interesting. He’s suggesting she go to Leeds to see Lupin and pose as a prostitute?? Wow.
*Gasp * She’s wearing high heels and hasn’t tripped yet?? I’m amazed!
That poem is beautiful. *Sniffles * The ending of this chapter was rather sad.
Author's Response: maybe i should have made her trip. ^_^
Thanks for reviewing again :D Report Review
Aw, George is sweet. Poor angsty George. I rather like him throwing the opposite of Remus’ excuses at her.
And Savage/Tonks rears it’s head to sniff the air. Wow, she does get around, doesn’t she?
Remus! Yay!! Hm…I’m rather glad she didn’t go with him. That would have been a mean thing to do with Savage, besides Remus was just trying to use her. Go Tonks!
Aw, she said the wrong name. That sucks.
Eek, Dawlish busting in on her in the shower. That’s quite an unpleasant surprise. And Savage saves the day, yay for Savage! I really do like him.
Hm, strange scruffy stranger following her because of Lupin…that’s…odd.
Author's Response: Yes, well, that's why I wrote her as a nymphamaniac. It fit w/ my story :D Don't worry, her string of boys comes to an end.
I heart savage. he's so hot in my head too. ^_^ Report Review
I heart George! I heart Fred too, but you haven’t put him in as much.
“I wondered if the Weasleys were writing a book about me for all the information they passed around.” – Haha!
I’m kind of glad that thus far she hasn’t hooked up with George. That would be a bit weird.
And re-enter Snape. *cue the music * Wow! That was…somehow unexpected. (The alley scene I mean.)
I wonder if Tonks and Savage will get together?
Author's Response: No worries bout George, I axe that sooner or later. ^_^
I looooved the alley scene, but, well, I was rather angsty when I wrote it.
*cough* no comment on the savage bit Report Review
Oo Fred and George! I love Fred and George!
I also meant to say last chapter that I like how you are showing how things sort of collapsed after Voldemort came out in the open.
Ew, sharing an apartment with Dawlish! And for the 15th time….poor Tonks!
Nymphadora the nymphomaniac…I find that rather amusing.
Snape is lovely and scathing, nice job on him! I used to hate Snape but he’s quite grown on me. Mutual loathing turning into sexual tension…that’s a new one for me.
Hm…possible fling with George. That would be interesting. Oo irate Molly…that wouldn’t be fun for Tonks.
Author's Response: Oh thanks, I almost forgot to put that in, I was so intent on the R/T nuances.
I know, mega ew with Dawlish. It's just so fun to make him evil and jerk-like.
I loooooove writing Snape, especially if I"m in a bad mood. The sexual tension thing is something I could totally see happening. It's the crux of a lot of opposites attracting fics.
Thanks again :D Report Review
Hm…I thought Farah was married… Grr. Aww poor Tonks! * sniffles *
The conversation between Tonks and Molly was quite nice.
Aw, I wondered when she would really start missing Sirius.
You jump time spans nicely, without dragging things out. Good job!
Yea, the relational idiocy was well balanced.
I also find it quite nice how you keep her clumsy without overdoing it.
Author's Response: I don't explain Farah for quite a while. It does get explained though. ^_^
I'm really glad you liked the tonks/molly bit. some people said Molly was too... something.
^_^ Thanks for the time span cmment, I have a hard time judging when I'm dragging something out or nto.
Ooh, good thing w/ the clumsyness. It is conviniant :D Report Review
Oo I like the ‘Snape busts in’ scene.
Aw the aftermath of the fight when everyone is injured and getting bandaged is good but sad! I like how you wrote how Tonks could hear stuff off and on but couldn’t really move. The scene with her and Moody and him confessing his love was so sad. I got a little misty eyed. And the misty-ness continued through her finding out Sirius was dead.
Oo ring stores! Rings are exciting. But…no…this is too easy. Gah, he lost his best friend, why does he have to go and dump his girlfriend now? …because he’s Remus, lol, and I guess that’s what Remus does.
“This isn’t over.” I said into his chest. He kissed my forehead and said in a quiet voice. “Yes, it is.” – Aw. * sniffles *
Chaos in the Auror office, fun! Lol.
Ah…Remus in bed with someone else…stupid stupid Remus!
Author's Response: I meant to say this when I replied to your last review, but I'm really touched you like my summaries/titles. I try to make them funny/clever. ^_^
Thanks again for your reviwe. Yeah, the rings were a mean/cruel touch on my part :D. I thought that the part where moody was reviving her in the books could have been a nice cover for a convo like that.
You might want to prep the things to throw at me for the next few chapters ^_^ Report Review
I feel the need to start off with the fact that I adore your chapter summaries. They are often quite hilarious, especially when you add action like * dramatic music * and * crowd cheers *. The chapter titles are quite nice as well. I also like that you reply to reviews! It makes me so happy to read what people reply to my reviews. If I see an author doesn’t reply to them I am much less likely to leave one, lol.
Ok…now to my review of chapter…what chapter am I on now? * checks * Ah yes, #14.
Have I mentioned yet that I really can’t stand Scrimgeour? You right him quite well but he’s such a horrible character!
Ah, I see the blue feet coming on. You did warn me multiple times I suppose. She seems to be rather insecure at times? Why would he be ashamed to date her?
And Sirius figures out person B…this should be interesting. Ok, not that interesting, lol, don’t get me wrong, still interesting, but there could have been so many lewd comments there. Course it could have promise later…
Ok, the feet aren’t that blue but the tongue is sharp. And now Remus tries to re-prove himself by taking her in public. Who wants to bet Dawlish makes an appearance? And he did, if only a mild one. I’m glad he’s backed off for now.
Oo she’s going to cook! First knitting now this. Molly will domesticate her yet!
And now the mild spat. I didn’t think he minded her sexual past. He lied, he lied! Ok, maybe not but that’s fun to say.
Aw, I like how you portrayed the aftermath of Harry’s floo call. Poor depressed Sirius.
Oo everyone acting weird. Foreshadowing, perhaps? To chapter 15, away!
Author's Response: I love writing a scrimgeour we can all hate. ^_^ he gets worse too.
I wanted to write in some person B jokes, but I decided against it.
*cough* emphasis on the 'for now'
I don't thinkshe'll win any blue ribbons for her cooking though, lol.
A lot of times people say they're ok with something until they're actually faced with it. Sexual history is usually one of those topics.
Thanks so much :D Report Review
Hm, I like her idea for a Valentines day present. And Sirius is great as always.
Did I mention I hate Macnair?
Hehe, I really like how you didn’t make the singing/guitar thing perfect. I was like ew mushy, but then you brought it to reality and I was like yay!
Approaching hiatus…well I knew it would come eventually. * sigh *
Well it’s now time for me to sleep. I’ll finish reading a reviewing soon! This really is a remarkable story.
Author's Response: It'd be too... cliche-ish if they were perfect singers and whatnot. ^_^
Get some sleep, the fic will still be here when you're up.
Thanks so much for your reviews. It gives me the chance to read a fic from the reader's POV. Report Review
Hm...whenever Remus gets too happy he has to poke at it until it breaks. Or if he doesn’t poke at it enough the stupid Ministry does.
And Elton John makes a comback! Whoo!
Lol, “International Day of Shagging” leave it to Sirius to rename the holiday something lewd yet hilarious.
Author's Response: Remus really is a tortured character. I explain it quite a bit in the next fic. ^_^ Report Review
“You mean he hasn’t?” Sirius said with the tact of a one-legged troll in a crystal shop. – Nice! Lol.
I also meant to included last chapter that I liked the characterization of Andromeda there.
“Pervy nudge.” Hahahaha
Wow, Remus got bold…FINALLY! Lol. He’s also quite romantic…I think I’ve said that about 10 times. Aw he finally said he loved her! I’m all a flutter! Amid blood and swerving buses…priceless.
Aw, poor sobbing Sirius… * sigh* He can’t be happy all the time I guess.
Wow, Remus has yet to get cold feet…I’m shocked.
Author's Response: I can't see the two of them ever having a smooth romantic moment. lol. Remus *had* to be romantic. *cough* ^_^
Don't worry, cold feet *are* coming :P Report Review
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