I love how you always put a heart in the seemingly ruthless characters. It shows that, though Harry did miss his parents, there were others who did also. 10/10

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i like the two storys of yours i've read so far because you bring out the goodness in usually considerd mean charictors.great story!

Author's Response: Wow thank you!

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Hi, I'm here to review!

First, you asked me if I liked the last lines. I did. I smiled, and I found it a sort of comic relief, even though I'm not sure I should have. ;) It seemed like the type of thing Petunia would say to appease Vernon.

Now, my honest feedback. I liked it, but it could have been better. I say this, because although the description you did have was nice, I'm a fan of stories with lots of description, o don't take it personally. I like the way you describe Harry's apprehension, and the lack of hostility in Petunia's voice. Like you warned me, the grammar was a little off, but I'm sure it'll be better when you run it by your beta. One thing I did notice:

tip toped down - did you perhaps mean tip toed?

Overall 8/10. Though the grammar was off, it definitely had an impact, and I like your reason for Petunia's hate of magic. The picture was a nice touch too. Good job!

~Katie

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your honesty and I'm def (sorry can't spell that word) sending it to my beta :)
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I really liked this story because it was very original. Your writing style flowed very well with this one-shot, and it was a very enjoyable read. I like how you have an explanation for Petunia and well, how you've given her a personality. I've seen a lot of stories on the archive that portray Petunia as a woman who only cares about Dudley, and it's nice to see that she does care for Harry.

I like how Lily gave birth to Harry at a Muggle hospital so Petunia could be there to witness it. You put your own original twist on the story, and I like that. Very nice story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the portrayal of Petunia, I didn't know if people would find it too OOC. I'm glad you could see that there is a softer side to her!

~LB

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ahh i love this one shot!

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Mhm... The end made me laugh.
I really like this story. It explains many of the reasons Petunia despises magic, and makes sense. Good job.
Gen

Author's Response: Nobody has mentioned the ending before and I really liked it, so thank you!!!

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That was great. I like how you wrote Petunia. Great job!

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wow...I mean, wow...this was so original and beautiful...wow...

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I love ur story is beutiful i hope u keep writting like that :-)

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wow, this was really good. different plot and all!

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Cute story. Interesting plot, I never really thought of it that way. You did a good job of getting your ideas organized and fitting them into the writing. Overall, very nice job and excellent writing.

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~LB

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