This was pretty good, just the beginning I hope. A few things though... You might want to go back and do an edit to fix the spacing, it was a little distracting. Throughout the chapter it was difficult to figure out what year this story took place in. It would only take a few well placed words to clear that up. :) But really, it's a strong start. I didn't notice any typos or spelling errors. No grammatical errors. That's really good. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. Report Review
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