such a cute story! But there's a bit of an issue with the spelling and grammar. I'd be happy to look over it for you and make the corrections if you wanted. :) I loved the plotline. James is so awesome! Report Review
you really need to work on that punctuation. it really takes away from a story when you do not have the correct (or any!) punctuation. Just some periods and/or commas! try to expand on the point when you are writing a little more. Report Review
Awww that was sooo amazing. I love it. You should write more Report Review
It was sweet. I liked it. Report Review
Aww, that was so sweet, but James had to find a way to ruin the moment with cockiness, didnt he? Good job. 10/10!Author's Response: Of course! im glad you liked it! Report Review
Good, the plot was good, but the sentences kinda went on and on. Like some of them needed commas... But it was really good!Author's Response: thank you im going to go back and edit it later. Report Review
cuteAuthor's Response: THANK YOU!! Report Review
that is soo good i love it!Author's Response: thank you i rote in like and hour so i wasnt sure if it was good! thanks so much!! Report Review
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