hehe this story is adorable!! :)
the speech didn't quite make me cry, but i did tear up and my nose started to tingle :')
of course, like most dramiones, this relationship was more developed than it should have been when the story started, so it's not the best. but it's really good, because draco doesn't realize that he's complimenting hermione until she tells him :) also, i liked how he believed that his pureblood upbringing meant everything was planned out for him and he couldn't change it. but hermione convinced him otherwise!! so sweet :D
the ball was really nice, but i think you could have done more of the "looking into each others' eyes and feeling sparks" stuff, that would have fit the mood. and changed the last dance to with draco. however, i think neville was a nice addition, to show his doubts about his own life previously. but he's not really a totally main character in this story, so i think i would prefer draco. :D
hahaha i loved the part in this chapter where he asks her out but he tries to deny that he's asking her out, that's so cute :) maybe two more chapters?? OR MORE. please? like write about the date and then them falling in love and marrying (and kissing + sex haha :P) and all that good stuff :) which makes my heart melt. :D
waiting for your next update!! keep up the good work :) Report Review
Please write the last chapter soon!!! Report Review
I LOVE IT! You're great at writing! 10/10 Report Review
10/10! CANT WAIT TO READ THE REST!
btw: Sorry, one quich question. Didn't you say the name was Xavier? With that spelling i believe it's pernounces, 'Ex [like eggs] a-vier' Sorry, I feel like im being a pain in the arse. I could be mistaken thogh =) Report Review
i would love to see pictures! i really like how you started the story, and the few lines of the song at each chapter's beginning Report Review
YAY! OMFG!!! NO WAY!! I HAVE GOT TO STOP DOING THIS! ok...im ok! it amazining! i really hope you hae the time to put the next chapter up!!! i have a VERY GOOD feeling about this!!! i hope u cna update soon! Report Review
aw this is so cute i cant wait for the next chapter Report Review
This story is just so cute! I love it. Please update soon. but only one more chapter? awww. make it good! 10/10Author's Response: well i have already written one draft, but i'm not too happy with it. i want to re-write it... which is what it taking me so long. being the last chapter, i want it to be good. hehe thanks so much for your review! i'll do the best i can!! Report Review
I like the chapter, but I like fluff. It had to be a little fluffy with graduation and draco asking hermione out. Im interested to see what was "planed out" for draco's life, and how they will intreact together and with others now that they are out of school. Please don't make me wait so long for another update!Author's Response: well, there's only one more chapter after this and then it's complete. i'm afraid it may not answer all the questions everyone's asking, but i believe it's a good way to end the story. i do have ideas about some sequels, but i have my mind on a cedric/hermione story. we'll see what happens tho.
anyway, thank you do much for your review! i must admit that fluff is my forte.. the next chapter should be in validation land, soon. (: Report Review
So, I'm waiting for the last chapter!!!
LG LunaAuthor's Response: i can't believe there's only one chapter left.. thanks so much for your review! Report Review
I enjoyed this chapter very much even though it made my cry a bit.Author's Response: aww i had no intention of making you cry.. but on the other hand, i'm glad your liked the chapter! Report Review
I liked this chapter very much!Author's Response: hehe thanks so much! i hope you like the rest of the story! (: Report Review
Levicorpus! There I jinxed you.
It's okay we all have lots of stuff going on with school back. I liked this chapter though and I can't wait to see how their date goes.Author's Response: ahh! well i'm typing this response upside down, considering you got my suspending in the air.. but, i suppose i deserve that! haha anyways, i hope you'll like the last chapter.. it may not be what you're expecting, but overall, i hope you'll like it! (: Report Review
I liked this chapter. Report Review
Because u said 'PLEASE PLEASE', i am reviewing. It's very very nice and i think u have a good future as a writer. Seriously!!! Report Review
About the chapter ; It's really nice. no! great. no! perfect!!!
seventh book ; i think you should try, i'd like to read about those too. Report Review
Yeah i liked it. Wanna read the next!!! Report Review
No, i just can't leave without reviewing. It's too nice. Can't wait to read next! Report Review
This is very very nice! I love it!!! Report Review
I actually liked this chapter, because we really got to see Hermione's emotions. Yeah, the transitions were a little choppy, but it wasn't much of a problem. I loved that Draco was nervous about asking her out, it was really sweet. Great job and please post the last chapter soon!
~Krystle Lynne~Author's Response: yep! I love the idea of draco being nervous. It makes him seem more.. human, I suppose. Anyways, I'm glad you liked the story.. I will definitely update it asap! Report Review
This chapter was cute.
Transitions between scenes I think could be done more smoothly. A lot of times it seemed a little "jerky" to me. I hope you know what I mean by that haha.
Only one more chapter? Wow, you should consider a sequel. Just a suggestion. :)Author's Response: haha thank you! i was thinking the same thing about the transitions. which is part of the reason why i think this chapter could be better. perhaps when i'm done with the story, i'll go back and fix all the errors.. thanks for the feedback!
yes, sadly, one more chapter left. i was considering making this story a trilogy... one story concerning harry and ron and the other story concerning the malfoys. i'm still considering it because i'm focused on my rose/scorpius fic right now. but a sequel will for this story will always be in the back of my mind. Report Review
ah lovely ending! i teared up when she was reminiscing about the hogwarts days! :'(
but i loved it, and cannot wait until you update!Author's Response: aww thank you! i will definitely try to update the last chapter asap! Report Review
ah i'm loving this story so far! i have my own version of how hermione looks, but i would love to see the way you intended her to look!
great job! :)Author's Response: thank you! just send me your email so i can send you the pics... trust me, the dress and the hair is beautiful! Report Review
e he asked her out on a date
aww that was a really cute chapter :D
hehehehe i loved how you showed him stammering
awwwAuthor's Response: yeah, i like to show a softer side of draco. after all, JK did say he sobered up after the war, right? (: Report Review
Yes I want to see a pic of the dress hair, and makeup! Hermione sounds so pretty! I have always thought that she and Draco would make a cute couple.Author's Response: i'd love to send you the pics, can you message me your email? thanks! Report Review
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