I'm trying so hard to hold in the tears but it's not working out. That was beautiful. I'd write more but I'm a little speechless. Report Review
I loved the story, It was really sweet but sad. Keep writing other stories. Report Review
hmmm this was very clitch with Lucius being happy and all, and Hermione looking beautiful, it all sounded like a fairytale gone wrong if you get what I am saying. Draco was Oc, and Hermione was also very Oc with the crying and all. I would redo this if I were you. It was just clitchy.Author's Response: did you mean cliche? And they were supposed to be out of character, that was the way I wrote it, i want to show different sides Report Review
aww, it's so bittersweet.
i like these little one shot things...
it's really good, i hope you write another one!Author's Response: huh, maybe I will! Report Review
I really love this pairing, and I have to say that you are wonderful at writing it. I loved the choice of song, and it seemed to go perfectly with the story. I can't believe that Pansey got Draco, but I was happy that you put the memories in there, so that we could see a little of the Dramione. The ending was rather sad, but you did a great job on capturing the emotions of each charater. Not to mention that it made me cry almost. I only saw a few mistakes, but nothing that took away from the story.
Great Job.Author's Response: wow thank you! this was my first attempt at a Dramione, I don't care for the pairing, but I really thought the song would fit so well with Draco and Hermione. My intention was to make it heart breaking and I'm glad I achieved that! Report Review
Adorable! This is probably one of the few fluff-sortof one-shot pieces that I have read, where Hermione and Draco give up their relationship in the end. You did a fantastic job of weaving in your flashbacks and marking them differently from the regular text. I love the lyrics you chose for this piece, I personally love the song itself! There were a few grammatical errors that I noticed here and there, but mostly you did an excellent job of keeping up with your stuff. :] I look forward to reading more of your work, awesome job!Author's Response: *blushes* wow! What a wonderful review! Thank you so much, I hope you enjoy my other stuff!
Hugs, Nicolle Report Review
*trembling lip* That last line...you really know how to write a gut-wrenching story, I'll give you that. It was beautiful. I love all the fics you write and this one was definitely amazing.
~Cheers!~Author's Response: Aw! Thanks! I really wanted this to be a big angsty tear jerker and I'm glad I succeeded! Report Review
Aw.. that was very sweet! It was a tad bit unrealistic, but the beautiful writing made up for it. Very nice songfic - good job! :)Author's Response: what part was un realistic to you? I thought I did pretty good with sticking with the cannon, except for the part with Hermione! ^_^ Report Review
Now I don't typically like songfics...but this one was pretty good! Course it helps that it has my two fav characters in it LOL. You wrote a good one, keep it up! *hugs*Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you gave it a shot anyway! Report Review
I'm crying. WAY too sad!It would have been better if they would have gotten together!Author's Response: I'm sorry, didn't mean to make you cry! Actually, I did that's why I wrote it , I wanted people to be torn over it. Report Review
omg thats sooo sad but u misphrased something. wen he gives her the necklace it should be nothings to good for you not nothings good enough for youAuthor's Response: oh your right!Thanks for pointing that out! ^_^ Report Review
This is fantastic! There is just one thing you missed though.
"Hey Harry, have you seen Malfoy around?" Ginny asked, tossing rocks into the lake. "No, I haven't seen her since History of Magic."
I think you ment Hey Harry have you seen Hermione. Other than that, which anyone could figure out, it's amazing!Author's Response: oops! *blushes* that is what I meant, Hermione, not Malfoy ^_^ Report Review
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