{reviewid: 1554313, reviewer: 'HHrDanceLvR'}
4th August 2007:
Aw... Harry is so in love with Hermione... he's just too dense to see it. You have a great knack for writing, and I'll be waiting for a new chappie! 10/10
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{reviewid: 1554295, reviewer: 'HHrDanceLvR'}
4th August 2007:
Well... this was pretty informative... awesomness!
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{reviewid: 1554289, reviewer: 'HHrDanceLvR'}
4th August 2007:
Wow... I forgot about the Dean thing at the end of HBP... see, if someone did that to me right after breaking up with them, I would never go out with them again... Great chapter!
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{reviewid: 1408834, reviewer: 'Guest'}
7th May 2007:
Hi im not signed up oranything on this site but i think you have a good story goin and please don make us wait too long of chaper 4
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{reviewid: 1406829, reviewer: 'reptar'}
5th May 2007:
yay! i love this so far. you use grammar, punctuation, and complete thoughts that make sense, which is becoming kind of uncommon on this site.
you write well and so far i want to keep reading!
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{reviewid: 1400574, reviewer: 'yeahthisismegan'}
29th April 2007:
uhm. yes. it would be Mrs. Rowling because as i have heard she is married.
AND i am in love with your story.
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{reviewid: 1393261, reviewer: 'hprbdfan'}
24th April 2007:
OMG i love ur story so far its so good!!! please keep on going! harry/hermione rocks!!!
-iliana
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{reviewid: 1392704, reviewer: 'Falco%20Peregrine'}
24th April 2007:
WOW! This is really well done!
You portrayed the characters well, even if Ginny's apparent reconciliation with Dean was a surprise. And I agree with Harry, two miracles in one day - Ron taking orders and voluteering to work - amazing!
The scenes you created are also well done and are easily envisioned. I only have one small suggestion: some of Hermione's dialog seemed a bit forced and formal. I think she would have used more contractions. She sounds too formal, expecially with how comfortable she would be with Harry.
Author's Response: I was trying to make her more formal sounding... but maybe I went a little too far :)
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{reviewid: 1390889, reviewer: 'DarkWizardKiller'}
22nd April 2007:
Well. It's an interesting start to what seems to be a good story but I don't think that Harry would risk another relationship with anyone as a result of what is facing him. Not very believable. I don't think Ginny is the kind of girl that would be so quick to run to Dean after what she and Harry had. She's had a crush on Harry since the second year. Also, I think Harry would be a bit more freaked out about all that has happened in book 6. I guess I'm a purist but the story is written very well so far.
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{reviewid: 1390297, reviewer: 'mrs_h_potter'}
22nd April 2007:
very good i like it alot keep up the great writting
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{reviewid: 1388652, reviewer: 'cpl'}
21st April 2007:
you have a very good writing style; as the story is easy to follow, and yet retains enough eloquence and flair for me to not realize it is made up. The story is very convincing; and my mind sometimes considers it a plausible book seven. Keep up the good work, i want to read the entire story!
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{reviewid: 1385998, reviewer: 'jabberwocky09'}
19th April 2007:
That was a really great first chapter but you should diffenitly write more soon though!
I LOVE IT!!!
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