I liked the part when Ron explains why he doesn't need to learn a shrinking potion. Some critism though, the wrong forms of certain words are used. Ex: too vs two, no vs know. Also, the progression is quite choppy, like there isn't any further explamation and feeling between the dialog. One last, minor thing, the format at the begining is a little awkward, like it may need to be centered or italicized or something. Good storyline though. Report Review
I thought it was pretty cute! It might be a good idea to go over it again for grammar mistakes and slow the dialouge down a little, but otherwise I liked it :) Report Review
short but i love ron and hermione Report Review
Great fic! Very cute. ^^ I saw someone already told you the two/too mistake so I won't bug you more with it, I did it myself before. Report Review
Nice... Just you mixed up two (meaning the number) and too (meaning also) it's a common mistake though... nice fiction well done! Report Review
This is good! 8 out of 10! Report Review
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