Oh wow, this was great. As I've said before, using a single moment in time and stretching it out, running it through a character's head, is one of my favorite writing devices, and once again you pulled it off fantastically.
I do have a few small, meticulous comments, though, if that helps any. x3
First, when you put "They would have rather died a coward's death than be forced to have their soul forced from their body," it sounded just a little odd because you used the word "forced" twice in that same sentence. But at the same time, I liked that sentence...especially because I'm in a shortened version of "Antigone" and the whole "die a coward's death" thing reminds me of that.
But enough of my off-topic-ness. I liked it. Very much.Author's Response: It is my favourite style after all ;) Thank you for your kind words. Yeah...it does sound awkward, but at the same time all the edits I can think of at the moment sound worse. I'll find something though. I hadn't even thought of Antigone til you mentioned it, but I can see it...Thank you so much Report Review
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