I liked this fic. One small fault i noticed was when you used the word wear you spelt it ware. You should watch for that but i loved the story line.

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I liked it. it was really good. you should definitely try more

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Very good attempt; I had fun reading it. Your work is very good, I just think that it wasn't the best charcterization I've ever read. 9/10, that's still pretty good!

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AMAZING!!

you capture their emotions, thoughts and fears brilliantly and express them with real care! the whole story was brilliant from start to finish, it had me gripped!

Author's Response: Thank em! I'm glad you liked it :)

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CUTE

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

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I thought this was quite a good beginning, giving a real insight into Lily's personality. However I think you need to work on your tenses; there seemed to be an odd mix of past and present tense. Otherwise, good beginning.

Author's Response: Ah! Yeah I need to get my grammar in order on this one, I'll try to bring it up to scratch :) Thanks neverfallax3

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Awww!!! That was so cute! How did you get the idea? You did a very good job! Props to you!



Author's Response: Thanks DA'sPheonix! I'm glad you liked it, to answer your question, I have no idea how I got the idea, I just woke up one day and started writing, weird huh? Thanks again for the review :)

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brilliant!

you should write more lily/james fic.
you really good but please make them longer!

Author's Response: Thanks dear, I'm thinking of doing a Marauder Novel, when I finish my 7th year fanfic. I promise that will be a lot longer than this. This was originally a one-shot that got out of hand lol, thanks again!

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YES, STICK WITH THEM! heeehee. *sings* did you ever know that you're my herrro *doesnt know the next part* you are the winnnd beneath my wiiings.

lol. erm. good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the WONDERFUL review! Lol, and the reviewer of the year award goes to...yes you've guessed it, ginnypottergurl793! *And the crowd goes wild* lol, thanks again that was seriously the best way to start the day :)

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omg, *wets self* THATS AWESOME!!! lol yay ur hillarious! the bit about james 'wishing he could make her smile like that' is awe-inspiring. lol. yayyy i luv it. 'few spelling errors, but WHO CARES!

Author's Response: Thanks again Hun, that was a very sweet review :D Will work on the spelling for you though ;)

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I LUV U! that was brilliant! I LOVE IT! i cant wait to see what james says. O M G u had me laughing the whole time! GRRREAT JOB!

Author's Response: Thanks Ginnypottergurl793! Lol, I'm glad you liked it :)

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so cute! i think you should leave it how it is. don't wreck it, its great how it is

Author's Response: OK, I won't wreck it I promise ;)

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i thought it was really good. couple of typos and a few times i was a bit confused about the tense you were talking in but it was really sweet and different and i really liked it = )

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i thought it was really good. couple of typos and a few times i was a bit confused about the tense you were talking in but it was really sweet and different and i really liked it = )

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it, and as soon as my exams are over, I'll look over those typos :)

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That was really touching!!! I loved it!!!

Author's Response: Thanks Zel91! I'm glad you liked it :)

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I LOVE IT! and... no, that's pretty much all.

Author's Response: Thanks very much for your review Norwegian girl :D !

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it was sooo cute!
i dont kno wht else to say, m quite speechless!
i think u can write any genre!
lol
write more!
rose

Author's Response: Aww thanks! I'll try to write more ^_^

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Aw.you should write more of these, they're cute!

Author's Response: Thanks Hermione_bestwitch! I'll try to write more of it :)

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Awwh! Well I loved it, definitely think you should write more James/Lily. It was really good/ Nice summarising chapter thingy lol. Awesome job! =D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for all your reviews! They were very encouraging :D

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Awesome. You write thoughts and feelings really well. Sorry for the short review but I should be asleep

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you still like it :)

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Hehe LOL! Like the ending to that chapter! Awesome. Love all the thoughts you managed to have like a whole chapter with one character and it made me want to read more, a difficult task so well done. It flowed really well too. I like it a lot

Author's Response: Thanks for the review marauder_lover! I'm glad you like it :)

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it was a really sweet story, a tad longwinded, but really enjoyable... your a natural at this genre, keep on going...please keep writing, lol...cheers

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! It was really nice of you :)

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For your first fic you should be handing the pultzer because that was really good. I loved the angle you took on the story, it really showed a maturity in your writing and it made me smile *hands a cookie* you should be really happy with it!

Author's Response: Ya! I get a cookie! Thanks so much for the awesome review, it was very sweet of you ;)

Btw~It's just my first Lily/James fic not my first fic entirely *cries as the pulitzer gets taken away* but I keep the cookie ;)

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Awww! How cute. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! *blushes*

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Again with the little errors: weird capitals, run ons, missing commas, etc.

"supposed to ware a Halo" - wear

And. YES! I love Lily/James fics, and you do them amazingly!!! This is great. I totally loved it. 10/10


Author's Response: Punctuation, my biggest fear, lol. I'll correct that sentence and read through it as well.
Thanks for all the CC you've been a great help :)

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