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Review #1, by Guovsahas This Is Why

27th January 2009:
well... considering the Sectumsempra spell he might as well had been a cutter in his younger years (yes yes it said "for enemies", but that dosnt stop him form using it on himself does it?).
Considering his upbring and school years I don't see that as far fetched.

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Review #2, by Marlene McKinnon This Is Why

26th May 2007:
I liked it. It was very dark like you said though. I dunno about the repetition of that whole paragraph in the beginning and the end. And i don't think you need to actually write "flashback" and "end flashback", it's pretty clear by itself. But other than that I really enjoyed this.

Author's Response: yeah, I realize the whole 'flashback' 'end flashback' is a bit amateur and I'm probably going to git rid of them when I edit this. I'm sorry you didn't like the repeated paragraph, I personally do though. To me it gives an aura of completion and shows that the whole thing comes full circle. Apparently you don't see it that way though, I apologize.

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Review #3, by mraudbdyy This Is Why

27th April 2007:
Nicely done. You had some sensitive topics in there and you handled them well. The part when Severus walks in to find the room on fire was a little sudden, but I could understand why he would have run away.

At first I was a little concerned about his mother. He obviously hated his father for beating them and I could see why he'd 'let him get what he deserved' (which was a very creepy line, in a good way), but my first reaction was 'what about his mother, he didn't let her die too did he?' I read back over and I noticed that part about Severus taking her beating and his mother fleeing from the room with 'not a thought of her only son crossing her mind'. I interpreted that as he left her to die too, because although she was the victim, he resented her too for being too cowardly to leave and protect him like a mother should...I could be wrong though.

And I didn't hate him after what he did, either. It was kind of a 'heat of the moment thing'. To me, I didn't see it as he actually wanted to kill his parents, it was just easier to walk away from the people who'd made his life hell, rather than saving them. My thoughts anyway (and I liked the way this made me really think about things).

Characterizations ... I don't really see Snape as a cutter myself, but you did pull it off well. Your descriptions were really good, especially things like 'the ruby liquid slid down his arm gracefully' and 'eyes that his father had turned cold'. Overall, very dark and very good. 9/10.

Author's Response: the line about 'they got what they deserved' was part of the challenge that originally inspired this, but the thread closed before I had finished this, leaving me unable to credit the person who started it. Yes, he tried to help her, but she was too selfish at the moment to have actually cared. Your interpretation of why he 'ran away' was correct.

Yes, he decided it was much better to simply walk away than save the two people who had not only made his life a living hell but also, his father mainly, didn't want the help. He had continually pushed away his only son in all aspects that he got to the point where he didn't even realize he was pushing away the one thing that could save his life.

I know that a lot of people can't really see Snape as someone who would become a cutter, even as an angsty youth, but the challenge I did this for required this plot in my mind, but it took me forever to find a canon character that seemed to fit it. I myself am still a bit unsure as to whether I think he would have been driven to the extremes of self-injury but the inspiration had it occur and it happened to have been Snape that was the character.

I'm quite happy with my descriptions, and I consider this one of my best works ever, fan fic as well as original. It probably has to do with the fact that this is a topic I feel quite strongly about and think talking about it should not be avoided or dumbed down or sugar coated. I did have to cut out a lot of the description I'd wanted to put in there due to the site's rules about self-injury/child abuse scenes. I'm glad you liked it though. Thank you for such the great review. This is the exact type of feedback I love to see.


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Review #4, by Laiquendi This Is Why

13th April 2007:
WoW! That was certainly DARK ! Gods I wouldn't wish that kind of childhood on anyone, it was a difficult topic but I do think you wrote it quite well...I really loved the line, 'eyes that his father had turned cold'...very good. It did make me sad to think that he would let his parents die though... I certainly hope he's not revealed to be that bad in book seven, you know how much I love him !!lol
~Nicely done!
~Lai.

Author's Response: Hehe, I loved the darkness! I wasn't quite sure if it was too much as far as how detailed I went in the self-injury scenes. I'm glad I managed to pull it off though.

When you look at it, he didn't let his parents die, not exactly. His father pushed him away, not in a literal sense of course. I think that in the end of Deathly Hallows Snape will be a good guy, even if he is a jerk. Thank you for the review!


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Review #5, by goddessofsnark This Is Why

11th April 2007:
I can't say I'm fond of this characterization of snape, but it is a well written piece, even if the character is different in my head-but as interpretations vary from person to person, and you'll never find two people who view the character the same, on the basis of developing him, you did develop him pretty well, and it was a well written piece, so on pure literary merit, it was well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you were able to put out differences aside and looks at it from a literary point of view. I'm glad that my oppinions of him seemed to be well explained even if they are different from yours. I should have assumed that considering your love of snape you would have you own oppinions but thanks for bothering to read and leave your thoughts.

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Review #6, by lothlorien This Is Why

11th April 2007:
i think i like it. can't be sure though. ;)
but you made snape somewhat heartless didn't you? i know his father made him suffer severely, but i don't think any child would let his family die. no matter what rowling says, i never thought of him as evil. not really. a little sadistic and very bitter, but not evil.
but then again, she did create him so he's any way she makes him. i guess...
i don't want you to be nervous so i'll just tell you this one thing. i made up my mind. i love this story.
ps: never mind the spelling mistakes.

Author's Response: I don't think he actually hated his parents THAT much, but he was caught up in the moment and his father didn't want help. Eventually things just got out of control and he thought it would be better to save himself than somebody who wouldn't show any gratitude towards him. In my opinion, that's the type of person Snape is, one that's out for himself. Glad you liked it though! Thanks for the review.

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