why why why why did you abandon this (frowns)Author's Response: Wow. that's the first review I've gotten that a person had noticed it's been adbandoned......*thinks*
Well I did that because I couldn't figure anything out. I will probably get back to it sometime or another. You for sure should check back since I will hopefully get around to it over Christmas (if I get lucky):) Report Review
Oh me like very much. can't wait to read moreAuthor's Response: Oh thank you. Unfortunatly it won't be for a while until I actually can write another chapter. Report Review
Well, it's a very promising first chapter... uh, prologue, I mean. lol.
So far, I must tell your characterizations of Hermione and Ron are good. You turned them into grown-up versions of their teen selves, but not too mature. You portrayed them well as young parents.
You could have written the whole chapter as one scene, but you divided it into a few parts. It created each time a disruption in the flow, and it underlined the fact that in spite of the ideal picture, under the surface, things were... not exactly broken, but not what any of them had dreamt about.
Nicely done!Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm really glad you liked it. Unfortunatly, because I am at a loss as to what to do with it and I am entirely engulfed in a new Draco/OC story and TM, I can't write any more on it. It took me a little while to get that the second paragraph was a good thing,....or at least I think it is. Lol
Thanks! Report Review
Great Prologue! I loved it!
Can't wait to hear more!
:)Author's Response: Thank you. Report Review
Good start... sets up that they are still in love but still fight which is them... updaye asap...Author's Response: thanks! I'm trying to update soon Report Review
I liked it. Mind you I had to read parts twice. If you want to brave the validation time, you might want to clean up the first bit just a little. Hm... I'm interested in what happens next. But I'm still not convinced that they would have all girls. Well one might be a boy - it seems a little unclear...Author's Response: Actually, Ayden is a boy. I might change his name later if enough people are confused, but I mentioned a think twice that he was a boy and used 'son' a couple times. Oh well. Thank you for your reveiw! Report Review
This sounds like it's gonna be really good! Keep going!Author's Response: Thank you very much! I will definatly keep going! Report Review
i love the story i cant wait 4 u to rite more!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm writing the second chapter right now! Report Review
interesting. i would really like to know whats gonna happen next.. please update soonAuthor's Response: Thank you. If there is anything that you would like me to improve on, please put that in the reveiw for the next chapter. I hope to have it up soon! Report Review
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