WAY TOO SHORT! you need much longer chapters to satisfy your audience! other than that so far your story's very good!
~_*|Hannah|*_~Author's Response: I know they're really short, and I'm sorry. If it helps, theres about 50 chapters, they're just all kinda short. The last one is very long though. Glad you think it's good beyond the chapter length though. Thanks for reading and for reviewing! Report Review
ah Lily saying that now but what about later. Another wonderful chapter full of thrills and you didn't go on and on about what actually happened in the matches!Author's Response: glad you liked it and thanks for reading! hope you enjoy the rest as well. Report Review
snazzy lily got them out of trouble i love the fire you put into lily in the passage and adding peeves was just great i loved it!Author's Response: glad you liked it. it's good to know that i've developed my characters well. thanks for reading! Report Review
hey can u
try 2 make
good jobAuthor's Response: yea, i know they're really short.... but if it helps, theres 41 of them in the story! some of them are randomly longer, but it really just depends on the chapter i guess. glad you liked it! Report Review
hahahaha, it's so obvious he likes her.Author's Response: Yup, its the classic, 'omg i actually like her thing'. It gets better, or at least I think it does, so please keep checking for updates! Report Review
Decent. It's a nice twist, to have them all friends in the beginning.Author's Response: Glad you like it, and that you like the twist. I do have to say though the idea was given to me by another reader almost 2 years ago, so I can't take near all the credit. Report Review
after your done with staging all of the pranks, i suggest you skip right till 7th year, unless you story revolves around the pranks. but if its supposed to be a 'Lily falls in love with James' story then switch to 7th year.
Wonderful story, keep writing.Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! I actually just finished the last chapter. The pranks were necessary to show how their relationship changes over time. It'll become the Lily falls for James thing over time. Report Review
Oh! Lily is soo frustrating. Amazing story though! I for one love it. TrixieAuthor's Response: Glad you like it! Don't worry, eventually Lily gets a little les frustrating. Report Review
I really like this story. It's AU in my favorite way since there is less Lily and Snape friendship, which I despise even if it is canon.
Update soon!!Author's Response: Glad you like it! I started writing it probably even before HBP, so it was way before the Lily/Snape friendship was even introduced. But still, glad you like it! Report Review
ahhh please tell me lily is going to get revenge!!Author's Response: Oh yea. She'll get her revenge all right. You can't spend a year with the future marauders without them rubbing off a little bit. Report Review
I LOVE it but I do have a question... When does James start to like Lily? Update!Author's Response: It should be coming very soon actually. Glad you like it! Report Review
i lke it =! All of it!Author's Response: good to know! glad you liked it! Report Review
NO! y did u have to make lily go all *shudders here* girly? sorry if this sounds harsh, but in my opinion, that was really cruel of u. *tear* y must all girls turn up un-tomboyish?Author's Response: I know what you mean. I'm the type that wants to stay tomboyish for life. In Lily's case, it had to be done though. Sorry. Report Review
really good 6 chapters cant wait for moreAuthor's Response: Glad you liked them! I just started school, but I'll try to post regularly if I can. Report Review
Haha James is so stuck-up, but its fun.
“I’d say it was pretty awesome, considering you beat every team you played,” Peter said.
Well spotted, Pete.
I also like how Sirius enjoys inflicting pain on other people
Its quite happy..
Excellant chapter, can't wait for an update.
Author's Response: wow, you're right, it was a very normal review. but it's like the third or fourth time you've reviewed and read this chapter, so i forgive you. Report Review
loved it! great chapter UPDATE!Author's Response: Glad you like it! I'll try to update again soon! Report Review
great match.. stupid malfoy!! good he is banned!!Author's Response: I had a ton of fun writing that chapter, and felt like a little Malfoy-bashing, so, that's the result! Glad you liked it! Report Review
The team captain, Alec Downs, flew over and said, “Evans, Potter, the two of you play amazingly together!”
“So we’ve got the spots?” Lily asked anxiously.
Lol that's like the best part. Lily doesn't even take the compliment and is all 'GAH ARE WE ON THE TEAM OR NOT WOMAN!?!?" Unless its a guy then she would say something like "GAH ARE WE ON THE TEAM OR NOT DUDE?!?!'
Yeah you get the point. Fantasticism. Update soon chica! Author's Response: Ummmmmmmm........we're not all as quick on the update as you are Fe. Lily just must be a tiny bit slow. Report Review
Amazing, as always :P. Yeah... so I've read this one a few times. It still makes me smile every time... possibly because the prescence of a certain pair of eyes... I don't know. Anyway... yeah... that's kinda weird to say considering right now he is like... only eleven years old. Oh well, I'll wait a few years. Author's Response: Yea, because you having this weird obsession with a currently 11 year old fictional kid is totally not the same with you having an obsession with a real kid who is five or six years older than you. Glad you like it though. Report Review
Its a good story so far. I wont add it to my favourites until something really cathes my interest. Good work!Author's Response: Glad you like it so far. It sorta starts off slow. Hopefully something will cause you to add it to your favorites soon! Report Review
omg the fic summary sounds great, waat yr are they in now, u never clarrified about that 1. anywayz plz update asapAuthor's Response: Glad you think it sounds good. It starts out in their second year, and goes all the way through school, and maybe more. Report Review
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