Cute chapter! You kept everyone in character, which is great, and I like Rebecca and Jacob. James isn’t going to take it well, is he? Lol, anyway, I like Rebecca’s little comment about her being fat when she really isn’t. It’s realistic, and I like that you used it in there. Good job! Report Review
This was a nice opening chapter. I like the humour in it and it flowed really well. Obsessive James is quite funny, but it could be a cliché if you’re not careful with it. There were a couple of typos in there, but nothing major. Other than that, this was a good chapter. Keep it up! Report Review
:) I love this story! It's really nice to read and it moves very quickly. Update soon! Report Review
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