aw that was soo sweetAuthor's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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ginny is such a bitch when i see her in this fanfic she dies
great story10/10Author's Response: Yeah, she is a bit (okay, a lot) OOC, but it was the only way to make the story work. Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing!
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I liked the story...I love Hermione/Ron stories...you should write another and string their romance along over more chapters...and have some fights in it. Ron adn Hermione always fight those make great stories! But I enjoyed yours!Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. I want to improve this one, because I really like the idea, but I will string a long a Ron/Hermione. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
The oocness of Ginny was a little distracting, but otherwise it wasn't horrible.
Actually, they really were all ooc. But I kinda like the idea.Author's Response: THanks for the review. Report Review
Vvell nice story ginny seemes really mean though.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Quite good, I do like it in fact there is just some things you could have done better.
I won't tell you again about Ginny because you said you already know about this so for me it's OK.
There is something in the way you write I think can be better, it is to simple, to easy. What I mean is that things do not happen naturally but because you want Ron and Hermione to end up together, they are kind of pushed in each other arms. For example about the dreams there should be a reason why they can do such things, not only because it could be useful for them, you can't just fly because you need to... Besides maybe you should describe a little further Krum's point of view, here he just seems to be the one who is there to bother Hermione and make it harder for her to be with Ron, you should tell how he feels so that he does not seem to be there because it was in the script but because he loves her.
Besides there is something about the dreams ... they understand to quickly that they are not real dreams but a way to talk to each other, maybe you should have had them think that it is just a simple dream with no real meaning for a time, it would have been fun ;-)
But (and don't worry about this « but » it is a good one ;-) ) there is something I liked about your writing, I can really see where it comes from but I think Hermione's point of view is easy to see, I mean that the reader share her feelings, that is a really good point that made me just get in the story easily.
I'm sure you will do really good work very soon because it already is quite good and you seem to want to improve your writing, keep on making stories !Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your advice! I will try to improve my fanfics, all of them, with this advice, because it sort of does apply to all! Thank you so very much! Report Review
it was a great story i love dreams they had together it was very romantic! Just one question though. what happens with Victor???Author's Response: I don't actually know what happens to Viktor. I may write a sequel, and it may detail what happened to Viktor, I'm not sure yet. But the sequel (if I write it) will be more about Hermione/Ron, Ginny/Draco and Harry/Luna. Report Review
this wasnt as good as i expected. i think you need to work on your writing style and the way you form your sentences in order to make a good story.Author's Response: THanks for the advice! I'm doing these fanfics to improve my writing, and I'll definitely take that into account! And I'm glad you can tell me what you think, and can give me advice. I really appreciate that. Thanks for the review! Report Review
GINNY IS SUCH A BITCH. haha . sorry, had to get that out of my system. Author's Response: It's okay. And she is. Thanks for the review! Report Review
i liked it.but i kinda thought it was wierd that draco and ginny were married.n e way good job.Author's Response: Draco and Ginny were not married, they were engaged. And my penname is ginny_malfoy22, so obviously I'm a big shipper of the two. Anyway, thanks for the review! Report Review
this is so goodAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review!!! Report Review
cool!Author's Response: AAAARRRRRGGGGGGGHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! I let you onto my account because I'm nice, not so you can leave reviews to me!!!!!!!!! Report Review
cute endAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review :) Report Review
good though ginny is very out of character ,dont see her with that much against ron even if had bad job. but liked it otherwise.Author's Response: Yeah, I know Ginny is out of character, but I didn't think Harry would go against it, and everyone seems to be scared of Ginnys bat bogey hex :)
Thanks for the review! Report Review
this is so totally cute you should have everyone get marriedAuthor's Response: Maybe I will write a sequel about that. Thanks for the idea :)
Thanks for the review as well :) Report Review
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