Wow, that was really, really good. I love how it was told in Neville's POV, it just made the story that much more interesting. Your ideas were very original, and I like how you kind of left it open for the reader to determine what happened. The last paragraph was my favorite part, though; the last line was perfect. Way to go!Author's Response: You know something? I love you right now. You're the first person to leave me a review in weeks. Give me a story idea or something you'd just like to read and I will write it for you by the next day. Seriously, your review is appreciated. If only all my readers were like you. Report Review
Hey, that was an amazing story. I wanted to cry.
Okay so here is what I have to say:
1. This is just my opinon, but I think that there is a little too much space between the paragraphs.
2. I liked how Neville was telling the story.
10/10 it was amazing!Author's Response: Thank you very much. I really can't tell you how good it feels that my work affected you like that. Because you're my first reviewer (I think) and you gave me such amazing feedback, I am going to give you a gift. Tell me some story or idea that you would like to see in writing and I will do my best to make you laugh, cry, or whatever else with it. Again, thanks alot. Means the world to be appreciated, you know. Report Review
That was really good. I liek how it was Neville telling the story, and I think it's sad how they all had to defeat Voldmort. Very sad, but a great story nonetheless.Author's Response: Thanks alot my rather contradictory friend. Yeah, the great but sad thing, that's the only review I ever get. If you want to read my only other (published) work, go to veritaserum.com and search for A Last Day under James Michael Caine. I lost count of the great but sad reviews. (of course I'm terrible at math...) I would edit the story, it's got lots of rough edges, but I kinda lost my password, so oh well. But anyway, I'm really glad you like my stuff, and if you decide to read the other one I hope you enjoy it too. Report Review
I LOVE YOUR STORY.IT'S GREAT!1Author's Response: Haha, I LOVE YOUR ENTHUSIASM. IT'S GREAT!! Thanks for the review, gave me a smile and a laugh. Report Review
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