Wow, poor Bella 0.o
I like your writing style and I hope you'll update soon=)
Great job^^Author's Response: i will try! thank you! Report Review
Ouch for Bella... oh, well... I'm not too into her, but, truly, you bring the characters out really well... Look, I'm actually sympathising with Bellatrix Black...
Cheers :)Author's Response: haha yeah i think bella is terrible, but there is something about her that fascinates me. thanks for reading! Report Review
In this very horrible review I'm leaving, all I have to say is:
a-w-s-o-m-e!Author's Response: hah not horrible at all! thanks so much. Report Review
Another really good chapter! I don't have that much to add to my last review, except that I thought a few of your adjectives were a little out of place- for example, the last line didn't really sound(to me, at least) like something he'd say affectionately. I thought that you portrayed the Death Eaters really well at the beginning of the chapter, and I hope you update soon!Author's Response: thats again! i totally agree with you, i was thinking of the usage of that word for a while but just let it go. but if you noticed too, something has to be done ahah
thanks again for reviewing! Report Review
I really enjoyed this! Your characterisation of Bella is especially brilliant- I really, really liked how you portrayed her. The general dynamics between the characters were really good too, and you chose a really original way of portraying Bella/Rudolphus. The spacing between paragraphs was a bit longer than usual, which I found a little offputting. The story itself, however, was amazing.Author's Response: thank you so much! hmm... im not sure about the spacing. ill look into in though i dont want something so silly to cause distractions. thanks again for the review. :D Report Review
This was great write soon againAuthor's Response: ill try :) Report Review
very intriguing! The family dynamic, and how it changes, was written really well. I liked the idea of the three sisters being good friends with Sirius as children. I can't wait to read more!Author's Response: thank you, im so glad you liked it. Report Review
PLEASSSE UPDATE! what same eyes?! i'm dying here!! [i made your banner P: ages ago] UPDATE PLZ!!!Author's Response: updated! it took forever i know :/ my apologies Report Review
This is really gripping!!! Is there any chance of a few more chapters cos I really want to know what happens next!!! Keep up the good work!!!Author's Response: i would love to update this story. i know exactly what i am going to do with it, i just dont know when i can find the time to write it all out! sorry to keep you waiting it will happen eventually though. so glad you like it. Report Review
Please continue - I'm very intrigued. Narcissa is a bit slutty, Bellatrix a bit protective... interesting indeed. :)Author's Response: hah yeah thats how i imagined them- but things will change soon.
thanks for reading and reviewing :) Report Review
great, keep up the good work :)
I hope you show us memories of when they were youngerAuthor's Response: i will. thanks a lot! Report Review
So good! Please, please, please keep on going! I'm begging you!
Author's Response: i will! it just takes me a bit. thanks for reviewing! Report Review
One finds that all the skeletons come out of the closet at funerals; all those little secrets come out to play as we remember those we have lost... but this family has an entire cemetery of skeletons to reveal, which should prove to be rather interesting.
Well written, but a few little grammatical mistakes that need a tweak to correct. Perhaps more description could be added, there is a lot of the past, but very little describing the present. What do the members of the Black family look like? What are they wearing to the funeral? What is the weather doing on the day of the funeral? A little more description wouldn't go amiss!Author's Response: haha very very true. description will come in later but ill try to fix up those grammatical errors you spotted. thanks loads! :) Report Review
well that was extremly interesting and well written, you've portayed the Black's very well if I say so myself ^_^ love the story can't wait until the next chapterAuthor's Response: Thank you! I will try to get around to it sometime soon, balancing three stories is a bit of a challenge but I couldn’t help myself. I am just so fascinated with this family. Report Review
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